The Fix
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Fix - Chapter Thirteen"A mother fights to prove her son's innocence
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think I'd be camping outside screaming he's innocent if it was my son! Lol. A mum knows her children inside and out, unless, of course it they had moved away for a few years. I know people change, but that is one heck of a personality change. Off I go again. :) I'm enjoying this. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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I think I'd be camping outside screaming he's innocent if it was my son! Lol. A mum knows her children inside and out, unless, of course it they had moved away for a few years. I know people change, but that is one heck of a personality change. Off I go again. :) I'm enjoying this. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I'm wondering, since Rachel is the one making arrangements, perhaps she'll decide to accompany her mother. Maybe she's hoping he's innocent, and perhaps thinking that a visit will help her to decide.
Thanks for sharing this chapter, Jacob.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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I'm wondering, since Rachel is the one making arrangements, perhaps she'll decide to accompany her mother. Maybe she's hoping he's innocent, and perhaps thinking that a visit will help her to decide.
Thanks for sharing this chapter, Jacob.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you Pam, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Daylily
You have done a good job expressing the anxiety Stacey is going through with her daughter just by wanting to see her son. It will be interesting for Joshua to talk about what happened in his words.
Note: An easy typo fix -- 2nd sentence, 1st paragraph:
I haven't been able to stop thinking about it since it was first suggested
(to) me earlier today.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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You have done a good job expressing the anxiety Stacey is going through with her daughter just by wanting to see her son. It will be interesting for Joshua to talk about what happened in his words.
Note: An easy typo fix -- 2nd sentence, 1st paragraph:
I haven't been able to stop thinking about it since it was first suggested
(to) me earlier today.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So sorry, I read these out of order. I was wondering as I read the previous post how it got from where you'd left off to visiting Joshua, now I know. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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So sorry, I read these out of order. I was wondering as I read the previous post how it got from where you'd left off to visiting Joshua, now I know. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you Barbara. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Excellent dialogue moving the plot along and revealing the tension and tentativeness Stacey is experiencing. Rachel seems ok with the idea which is obviously a relief (why do I have my suspicions about her?) The next stage will be interesting when Stacey visits. An edit below:
since it was first suggested (to) me
You've got me hooked here. Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Excellent dialogue moving the plot along and revealing the tension and tentativeness Stacey is experiencing. Rachel seems ok with the idea which is obviously a relief (why do I have my suspicions about her?) The next stage will be interesting when Stacey visits. An edit below:
since it was first suggested (to) me
You've got me hooked here. Debbie
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you Debbie, I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
I'll be interested in seeing how that goes. I hope he really is innocent but we only have his mother's word for that and a juror who indicates she believes he is although, she voted with the others to convict I think. The English system may not work the same as here where all twelve have to agree.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I'll be interested in seeing how that goes. I hope he really is innocent but we only have his mother's word for that and a juror who indicates she believes he is although, she voted with the others to convict I think. The English system may not work the same as here where all twelve have to agree.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you Beth. In the UK there only has to be a majority. Thank you.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Jacob,
It's good to see young people writing on this site. You have a promising career in front of you!
I like your story. A mother seeks to see her jailed son for the first time since his incarceration. It's a difficult thing to see, but she is determined.
We see her doubt and frailty, but her friend promises to help.We'll see if she's able to prove his innocence.
Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Hi Jacob,
It's good to see young people writing on this site. You have a promising career in front of you!
I like your story. A mother seeks to see her jailed son for the first time since his incarceration. It's a difficult thing to see, but she is determined.
We see her doubt and frailty, but her friend promises to help.We'll see if she's able to prove his innocence.
Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Rhonda, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
