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The Tainted

Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Siblings"
A fantasy story following hunter Taya

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Comment from jim vecchio
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What IS going on? I guess I'll find out soon. Now I know what happens when the two sisters meet. I didn't expect that reaction. Good writing! One small typo: As it turns out, we share I nickname.. Shoild that be "a nickname?"

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
    Oops, thanks
reply by jim vecchio on 20-Jun-2024
    The typo was hardly worth mentioning, but your writing is so good, I don't want anything to spoil it.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
    I appreciate it when you point it out. The reader experience is much better without typos
reply by jim vecchio on 21-Jun-2024
    You can have lots of fun spotting all my typos!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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It would appear that Taya has established herself.
That's when drill sergeant Demi butt in. - (butted)
Now what's going on?! - It would be better to use words should relate the exclamation. Multiple closing punctuates are not supported by the rules of writing.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
    Thank you for letting me know