Comment from
jim vecchio
What IS going on? I guess I'll find out soon. Now I know what happens when the two sisters meet. I didn't expect that reaction. Good writing! One small typo: As it turns out, we share I nickname.. Shoild that be "a nickname?"
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
reply by jim vecchio on 20-Jun-2024
The typo was hardly worth mentioning, but your writing is so good, I don't want anything to spoil it.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
I appreciate it when you point it out. The reader experience is much better without typos
reply by jim vecchio on 21-Jun-2024
You can have lots of fun spotting all my typos!
Comment from
Wayne Fowler
It would appear that Taya has established herself.
That's when drill sergeant Demi butt in. - (butted)
Now what's going on?! - It would be better to use words should relate the exclamation. Multiple closing punctuates are not supported by the rules of writing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
Thank you for letting me know