Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

I'm trying to figure out what her beating chamber is. I thought it was her heart. But, then it being burned down might not make sense.

The last line is a good one. Together they harmonized.

Have you ever seen a female with dimples? Is that something only a man can have? We'll, he put dimples on her face

Thinking retroactively, her heart was broken and in ashes. He came along and fixed her heart. So now both hearts can harmonize. Just beautiful

I really enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024

Yes, this is actually a true story. The chambers of her heart were destroyed (I happened to use fire as the culprit) and the simple smile of her new love restored the beautiful dimples she once had. Thank you for reading and a very nice review.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I wish I had a six for your 4 linear, amazing poem "her beating chamber
had burned to ashes,
his simple smile
brought dimples to life.

together they harmonized!" Love the dimples of life, excellent image:) I have nothing to add. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024

Very nice review. Thank you.