2024 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Embrace Me".
5 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, how alluring Autumn can be! And for many poets, Autumn is the best season. Many people find Summer's heat too much to handle. But Autumn brings all the delight to our senses as you mentioned from the colors, to the taste of caramel apples and cinnamon, and the smell of the harvest with the sound of the crisp leaves.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Ah, how alluring Autumn can be! And for many poets, Autumn is the best season. Many people find Summer's heat too much to handle. But Autumn brings all the delight to our senses as you mentioned from the colors, to the taste of caramel apples and cinnamon, and the smell of the harvest with the sound of the crisp leaves.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I changed twilight eyes with hazel eyes.
Thank you very much for reviewing my poem. I appreciate your time and kind words. Have a lovely day, big sister.
Love
Marival
Comment from RJ Heritage
Perhaps a longiing for the touch of a Lover? Certainly, words that project deep love that is missed. Delicate and passionate words, amigo a motif is alluring.
RJ
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Perhaps a longiing for the touch of a Lover? Certainly, words that project deep love that is missed. Delicate and passionate words, amigo a motif is alluring.
RJ
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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The poem is about the personification of autumn.
Thank you very much, I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful evening. I added it in my notes, thank you.
Gypsy
Comment from Esther Brown
I loved this one! The picture perfectly matched the poem. Beautiful! You have such talent. I am in my last few weeks before retirement but want to learn more about poetry rules. Esther
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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I loved this one! The picture perfectly matched the poem. Beautiful! You have such talent. I am in my last few weeks before retirement but want to learn more about poetry rules. Esther
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Hello, Esther, feel free to contact me if you need help or have questions about Japanese poetry and free verse. Congratulations on your retirement. Time to take it easy and write or whatever you like.
Thank you very much, I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful evening.
Gypsy
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You too.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You painted a gorgeous picture with your words in this poem. Even without the beautiful artwork one could see the scene as you described it. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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You painted a gorgeous picture with your words in this poem. Even without the beautiful artwork one could see the scene as you described it. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you, I appreciate your generosity and kindness. Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
love all the different colours you used
"dusted with cinnamon and yearning" is a cool image
one suggestion i have is to maybe take the 2 "the's"? and just have:
I'll sweep summer away
with my amber gown
brushing dying leaves
just a thought i had while reading...
two great sestets!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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love all the different colours you used
"dusted with cinnamon and yearning" is a cool image
one suggestion i have is to maybe take the 2 "the's"? and just have:
I'll sweep summer away
with my amber gown
brushing dying leaves
just a thought i had while reading...
two great sestets!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you for helping me, I always appreciate it.
Also, for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy