The River Beckoned
Elderly man finds 4 glowing pods in a river; friend or foe?4 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry
OMG! This is absolutely wonderful. The story is engaging , and i follow along. Although you go back and forth, I never lose hold of the thread. great work. Now, about this site:
Folks here want pictures. When i first got here, I was was very much against it. But, A lot of people will not read you without one. Pinterest is your best source. It has millions. They are free if you mention them in your Author's notes.
There is also Google, Bing, Stock, and others. Some folks have programs and make their own. I cannot draw a straight line. Marvelous work here. Karen
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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OMG! This is absolutely wonderful. The story is engaging , and i follow along. Although you go back and forth, I never lose hold of the thread. great work. Now, about this site:
Folks here want pictures. When i first got here, I was was very much against it. But, A lot of people will not read you without one. Pinterest is your best source. It has millions. They are free if you mention them in your Author's notes.
There is also Google, Bing, Stock, and others. Some folks have programs and make their own. I cannot draw a straight line. Marvelous work here. Karen
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thank you Karen. I really ventured out of my comfort zone with this one. I very pleased you like it. I was put off by picture thing as well, but your right, many seem to expect it here. I'll go back and add some to my works.
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Also, a big enough font, good spacing betwwen sentenses and paragraghs. Color of front can add or detract, Font style is also impotyant. as is matting. And grammar is mean and spiteful:-) Karen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your first milestone post and attempting a contest from day one. This is an excellent contest entry, and I enjoyed reading. I could feel Chet's struggle with the necessary decisions. Good luck with the contest.
The next day at the park proved to be unproductive (The following day)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Congratulations on your first milestone post and attempting a contest from day one. This is an excellent contest entry, and I enjoyed reading. I could feel Chet's struggle with the necessary decisions. Good luck with the contest.
The next day at the park proved to be unproductive (The following day)
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Hi Barbara
Thank you for the positive review and star rating for my story. This one is a bit of a sci-fi mind bend and hopefully touching as well. I'm glad you enjoyed it. it was fun to write. This story has been published in my latest collection.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Congrats on your first post! It's a good one! You do a wonderful job of sharing Chet's inner turmoil. I enjoyed watching as he confronts life-altering decisions amidst grief and financial strain. Your writing is excellent. You share the emotional landscape of aging, loss, and the enduring bonds that define us so well in this story. Excellent use of dialogue as well. I enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Congrats on your first post! It's a good one! You do a wonderful job of sharing Chet's inner turmoil. I enjoyed watching as he confronts life-altering decisions amidst grief and financial strain. Your writing is excellent. You share the emotional landscape of aging, loss, and the enduring bonds that define us so well in this story. Excellent use of dialogue as well. I enjoyed it!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much for this review. I put a lot into this story, I'm so pleased that you enjoyed it. I got to thinking about mine and my wife's coming older years and this is what I came up with.
Comment from pome lover
Well, that was a book, in itself. Fascinating and weird.
Chet was a strange man -- to me, anyway. He cared for his family members; wanted to do the right thing, each time, trying to help his wife and not burden his daughter, but each time he tried to end his life, he didn't, until the pods. The pods were odd (oddpods, ha), but they did add a touch of fantasy. You asked the question re: them, friend or foe. All I can say is he died in one, but that was his choice, so...I guess, friend.
Good story.
Katharine
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Well, that was a book, in itself. Fascinating and weird.
Chet was a strange man -- to me, anyway. He cared for his family members; wanted to do the right thing, each time, trying to help his wife and not burden his daughter, but each time he tried to end his life, he didn't, until the pods. The pods were odd (oddpods, ha), but they did add a touch of fantasy. You asked the question re: them, friend or foe. All I can say is he died in one, but that was his choice, so...I guess, friend.
Good story.
Katharine
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Thank you Katharine for your positive review of The River Beckoned. I'm very pleased that you enjoyed it. I'm new to FanStory, so I'm still trying to figure things out here. You were the first to review a story of mine, so thank you once again.
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You're most welcome.
