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A Free Verse

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Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi Jessica,
This is a well written free verse poem from the point of view of the cactus in the artwork. It is surprising that anything can grow in such harsh surroundings. It is a good metaphor of how we can get through life's trials.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Enjoy your day and week.
Joan

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
    Thank you so much, Joan. I really appreciate that.
    Xo
    Jess
reply by dragonpoet on 04-Aug-2024
    You are most kindly welcome, Jessica.
    Joan
Comment from Samantha Wymer
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Congrats on your win. Your poem has a very strong meaning to tell us all. Your poem speaks for itself. I love the picture you picked out. Awesome writing. I can't wait to read more of your writing.
Sam

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
    I truly appreciate it. Thank you so much, Sam.
    Xo
    Jess
reply by Samantha Wymer on 03-Aug-2024
    Your very welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
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This free verse, Why, with response to the last thought on survivor guilt, shows someone remaining strong when others wilt in the environment. The thing to avoid would being inaccessible as we might see the cactus.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2024

Comment from tfawcus
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There is such powerful use of sustained metaphor here to make your point memorable. I thought this a particularly well crafted poem. Very well done indeed.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2024

Comment from rspoet
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Hello Jessica,
Why? One of those eternal questions.
The who, what, where, when and how are easier to answer,
but "why" is more ethereal. It assumes there is a reason.
Some insist they know, but they don't, not really.
It's likely there is no answer, but if there is or isn't,
either way, it can still motivate, help to bring solace
and add to the positive side of existence.
Wonderful free verse.
Your extended metaphor is excellent.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024

Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Very nice image and presentation, Jess.
-Your note is appreciated.
-You wrote a very good poem that flows well.
-I also like how you personify the plant.
-A very good opening verse describes
the setting and the mood.
-But conditions aren't always pleasant;
there is a lot to endure to survive.
-A very good verse about distrust
represented by the "spikes among the flowers."
-A very good closing verse about being
resilient and wondering why.
-I can see how you were inspired by survivor's guilt.
-Very well done.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024

Comment from Cindy Decker 3
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Author, your poem is exceptional. You paint a wonderful picture of resilience and strength, overcoming some unspoken antagonist.
The photo is symbolic and fits your poem well.
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024

Comment from Shanbreen
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Jessica, I love this poem reflecting on the will to survive. The surfacing of the spikes adds a new dimension attributed to jealousy? protection?...

"to not merely survive-
but to bloom."

Great attitude.


 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024

Comment from gansach
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This is an excellent entry for the free verse competition. I love the personification with the cactus to describe the emotion felt. The verse flows nicely, very descriptive. Wonderful work!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024

Comment from June Sargent
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A thought-provoking piece that captures perfectly the thoughts that might be going through the mind of a survivor. This lone flower blooming in the barren desert surrounded by prickly thorns. Why indeed. Great entry for the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2024