The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Storm"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
3 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice interaction. Good work.
Instead of being greeted by the morning sun a sudden storm blew in. - I would put a comma after 'sun'.
I started hyperventilating, my mind filled - Maybe a period separating the two sentences, or a semicolon.
"Your welcome. - (you're)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Nice interaction. Good work.
Instead of being greeted by the morning sun a sudden storm blew in. - I would put a comma after 'sun'.
I started hyperventilating, my mind filled - Maybe a period separating the two sentences, or a semicolon.
"Your welcome. - (you're)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the edits!
Comment from jim vecchio
In time of storm, two very different people grow closer. A great installment. I never know which way this tale will turn, except that there will be a romance brewing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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In time of storm, two very different people grow closer. A great installment. I never know which way this tale will turn, except that there will be a romance brewing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Thank you! That means it will be more exciting for you!
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
My breath quickened. It was like facing a nightmare. An enemy that can't be cut down or stopped. If I was smart I would have taken out a match or a flare, even if it was only temporary.
This was a fun read start to finish and had good character development
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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My breath quickened. It was like facing a nightmare. An enemy that can't be cut down or stopped. If I was smart I would have taken out a match or a flare, even if it was only temporary.
This was a fun read start to finish and had good character development
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Thank you again!