The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Those left behind"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
2 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done. Good plot movement.
When neither Taya nor Demetri returned they packed the buggy... - I don't know the language of the exact rule, if there is one, but it feels like there should be a comma after 'returned'. (But I could be wrong.)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Well done. Good plot movement.
When neither Taya nor Demetri returned they packed the buggy... - I don't know the language of the exact rule, if there is one, but it feels like there should be a comma after 'returned'. (But I could be wrong.)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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You're probably right, thank you :)
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
I enjoyed reading this from start to finish. You grab my attention and pull man and my attention throughout the whole entry. Good job and best of luck overall going forward.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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I enjoyed reading this from start to finish. You grab my attention and pull man and my attention throughout the whole entry. Good job and best of luck overall going forward.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much