The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Battle"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
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Comment from jim vecchio
Glad to see you continued your revised format, from synopsis to characters. Your title told us right from the start, this tale would be full of action. It will be interesting to know more about Demi's sword.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Glad to see you continued your revised format, from synopsis to characters. Your title told us right from the start, this tale would be full of action. It will be interesting to know more about Demi's sword.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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I do take your advice to heart as I wish to be an active member of this community. I really appreciate your continuous support :)
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I'm far from the best writer on this site, but I always learn from others.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
Brandy sprung into action next and began dousing the mutant in oil. It didn't know what to do with the sudden baptism and the mist disappeared. Derek had switched to the morning star and unleashed powerful swings at the mutant. The crunch of bones could be heard. Angry, it picked up Derek with the mist and threw him into Brandy. They both fell to the side with a thud. That's when Jer threw the first flare. It's clothes caught fire. Jer threw two more for good measure as Derek and Brandy scrambled to their feet
Great use of imagery!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Brandy sprung into action next and began dousing the mutant in oil. It didn't know what to do with the sudden baptism and the mist disappeared. Derek had switched to the morning star and unleashed powerful swings at the mutant. The crunch of bones could be heard. Angry, it picked up Derek with the mist and threw him into Brandy. They both fell to the side with a thud. That's when Jer threw the first flare. It's clothes caught fire. Jer threw two more for good measure as Derek and Brandy scrambled to their feet
Great use of imagery!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Ricky1024
Your chapter entitled, "Battle"
Yes, was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Your chapter entitled, "Battle"
Yes, was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Thank you