The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "From the Depths"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
5 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
It sounds a bit like overdone works: Invasion of the Body Snatchers, Night of the Living Dead, Puppetmasters, but the writing is good, and the protagonist sounds interesting. I'll see where it goes.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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It sounds a bit like overdone works: Invasion of the Body Snatchers, Night of the Living Dead, Puppetmasters, but the writing is good, and the protagonist sounds interesting. I'll see where it goes.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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I'm not familiar with those works. The inspiration was somewhere between Dungeon and Dragons and Korean fantasy novels. Hopefully it gives you some surprises. If it ends up being a cliche hopefully it's at least a good one lol Thank you for reading
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I reread my review. I didn't mean to be negative. Certainly my ant story could be compared to thousands of bad boy/good girl love stories.
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It's okay, I didn't take it negatively. It's more like a challenge and I like winning!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This little bit of fact shows how serious things have become: " But I've abandoned my flute and replaced it with a sword. The blacksmith was one of the first to fall so I raided his residence for weapons. Sounds immoral but he won't miss them. Besides I do much worse things. This sets the reader in the right frame of mind to enjoy your story. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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This little bit of fact shows how serious things have become: " But I've abandoned my flute and replaced it with a sword. The blacksmith was one of the first to fall so I raided his residence for weapons. Sounds immoral but he won't miss them. Besides I do much worse things. This sets the reader in the right frame of mind to enjoy your story. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much! If you choose to read more, I hope you enjoy it!
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I have it on my list of chapters to read
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Thank you, I hope you enjoy the story :)
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***Smile***
Comment from jim vecchio
An interesting and somewhat gruesome chapter. Very imaginative. Hope to read much more of it. One small correction: Last paragraph, second sentence, should read "nimble." Not nitpicking, just trying to allow your writing to stand out as much as possible.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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An interesting and somewhat gruesome chapter. Very imaginative. Hope to read much more of it. One small correction: Last paragraph, second sentence, should read "nimble." Not nitpicking, just trying to allow your writing to stand out as much as possible.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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ooops thanks! That's what it's supposed to be I guess autocorrect thought otherwise!
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Someone always find something that needs to be redone in my posts, so don't fret.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
I am a hunter of the tainted. I had planned to be a bard and earn a living while searching for Tali. But I've abandoned my flute and replaced it with a sword.
Powerful writing and it kept my attention from start to finish. All the best going forward.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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I am a hunter of the tainted. I had planned to be a bard and earn a living while searching for Tali. But I've abandoned my flute and replaced it with a sword.
Powerful writing and it kept my attention from start to finish. All the best going forward.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Erica
I enjoyed your story about horrific creatures trying to take over the earth
Funny, the first thing I thought of to get rid of those aliens was to kill the host also especially since it looks like the host was already killed trapping whatever soul was in the body
Killing the host actually freed the host allowing its soul to go to heaven
Below, should be is taking place because the subject is commerce.
" The pay is meager but no commerce but that which is absolutely necessary are taking place anyways. "
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Hi, Erica
I enjoyed your story about horrific creatures trying to take over the earth
Funny, the first thing I thought of to get rid of those aliens was to kill the host also especially since it looks like the host was already killed trapping whatever soul was in the body
Killing the host actually freed the host allowing its soul to go to heaven
Below, should be is taking place because the subject is commerce.
" The pay is meager but no commerce but that which is absolutely necessary are taking place anyways. "
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you!
