DUEL with the DEVIL
Viewing comments for Prologue "DUEL with the DEVIL - Prologue"The problem of creating a non-addictive painkiller
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
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I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
Comment from BethShelby
I'm anxious to read this story. I hope there is way to come back from this. I take you aren't getting a patient on this invention. The FDA would never sign off on it.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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I'm anxious to read this story. I hope there is way to come back from this. I take you aren't getting a patient on this invention. The FDA would never sign off on it.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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As is, you're absolutely correct about that. This begs the question: is it possible to have an outstanding painkiller that isn't addicting? That's where I'll be going with the story.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting prologue you have penned. You used great descriptive words. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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This is a very interesting prologue you have penned. You used great descriptive words. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Thanks very much, Teri. I appreciate your reading and commenting. Chapter 1 is out now if you feel like continuing with the story.
Comment from T B Botts
Hey Jim,
Somehow I managed to skip over this chapter and read chapter one first. Wow! Talk about depressing. How does one start to pick up the pieces when you've hit rock bottom? I can't imagine being in such a state. I fear that I'd be taking all the pills I could get to put an end to my miserable life. Well done. Very descriptive.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Hey Jim,
Somehow I managed to skip over this chapter and read chapter one first. Wow! Talk about depressing. How does one start to pick up the pieces when you've hit rock bottom? I can't imagine being in such a state. I fear that I'd be taking all the pills I could get to put an end to my miserable life. Well done. Very descriptive.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Hey, Tom. Thanks so much for reading and commenting and those 6 stars too. Glad you're along for the ride.
I've never quite been in this state, but I can understand the forces that brought him to this point. That's what this story will be about.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An interesting story filled with good descriptions. It kept my attention from start to finish and my only question is, where can I find me some of that Dipraxa stuff???? Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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An interesting story filled with good descriptions. It kept my attention from start to finish and my only question is, where can I find me some of that Dipraxa stuff???? Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Ha-ha! Be careful what you wish for, Marilyn. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sallyo
Okay- I should have read this before CH 1, but never mind. This sounds surreal and the tense switches about but I'm guessing that is deliberate to show the narrator's mindset at the moment. I'll try to read in order in future!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Okay- I should have read this before CH 1, but never mind. This sounds surreal and the tense switches about but I'm guessing that is deliberate to show the narrator's mindset at the moment. I'll try to read in order in future!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Ah. Glad you went back and read it. This is where the story starts, but Part 1 will show us how he got to this point, while Part 2 will be concerned with where he will go from there.
Comment from Earl Corp
Oh wow! I'm glad I read the first chapter first, this doesn't look good. I'll stick with it to see if he gets away from the addiction or not. Good luck with the book.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Oh wow! I'm glad I read the first chapter first, this doesn't look good. I'll stick with it to see if he gets away from the addiction or not. Good luck with the book.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Yes, he definitely ends up in a deep hole. Part 1 will be devoted to how he got to that point, while Part 2 will take place in present day to see if he can extricate himself and what he will do with the knowledge he has gained from the experience.
Comment from tfawcus
An intriguing start to your new story, Jim. Addiction is a real problem in today's society and once the pit is dug, it is not easy to climb out. This sounds as if it will be a tale on the classic theme of good versus evil. Every choice has its consequences.
Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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An intriguing start to your new story, Jim. Addiction is a real problem in today's society and once the pit is dug, it is not easy to climb out. This sounds as if it will be a tale on the classic theme of good versus evil. Every choice has its consequences.
Good luck with it.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Tony. Addiction is definitely one of the themes of this story, as is the exploration of pleasure vs pain as motivating factors in people's lives.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This sounds like a life gone off the tracks and a man not too sure how to get back to normal. He is making his own drugs to end the pain, which makes sense, but it seems to have driven his wife away and left him living like a total slob. I will be interested to hear his explanation for how it all went so wrong to be out of pain.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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This sounds like a life gone off the tracks and a man not too sure how to get back to normal. He is making his own drugs to end the pain, which makes sense, but it seems to have driven his wife away and left him living like a total slob. I will be interested to hear his explanation for how it all went so wrong to be out of pain.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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This will be a two part story in which part 1 will be devoted to how he got to this position in his life and go all the way back to when he was 12 years old, while part 2 will be devoted to present day to see what will happen now. I've got part 1 semi-planned out, but I've put very little thought into part 2 just yet. I guess I'll go where he takes me.
How much planning ahead do you do, Carol, when writing a novel? In other words, are you a plotter or a pantser?
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I determine what the setting will be, SF, mystery, etc. Pick a main character, and then wrap the story around her or him, not so frequently him as I worry I have the wrong perspective on some men.
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Got it. How much of the plot do you work out before you start writing it?
Comment from Janet Foor
An intriguing storyline Jim. Self destruction and rock bottom means that you have only one way to go from there and that is"up"'.
I will be intimidated seeing what does happen next.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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An intriguing storyline Jim. Self destruction and rock bottom means that you have only one way to go from there and that is"up"'.
I will be intimidated seeing what does happen next.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Janet. I'm hoping he'll be able to dig himself out of this hole he created for himself. I don't know, myself, yet just how far out of the hole he will be able to come.
What he does next will take a while to get to and will be in part 2, while part 1 will deal with how he got to this point.