Sorrows
A 5-7-5 poem4 total reviews
Comment from Kelly Louisa Balliu
This poem summarises the old adage 'one for sorrow.' Whenever I see one magpie, I always hope another will follow to bring joy. The solitary description of this little bird standing alone on the power line is poignant and I was able to visualise the sadness that echoed from its song.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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This poem summarises the old adage 'one for sorrow.' Whenever I see one magpie, I always hope another will follow to bring joy. The solitary description of this little bird standing alone on the power line is poignant and I was able to visualise the sadness that echoed from its song.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
With kind regards
Comment from zanya
Yes and also chirping life's joys, does it not ?- this bird appears to be the bearer of both sorrow and joy in the world - an interesting topic for the 5/7/5 poetry contest
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Yes and also chirping life's joys, does it not ?- this bird appears to be the bearer of both sorrow and joy in the world - an interesting topic for the 5/7/5 poetry contest
Comment Written 28-May-2024
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Not this one probably because this was near a major construction site with lots of trees being cut down.
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Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Sorrows, has the proper formatting and pictures the black dour bird seemingly commenting on the poor state of affairs among the creatures below.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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This 5-7-5, Sorrows, has the proper formatting and pictures the black dour bird seemingly commenting on the poor state of affairs among the creatures below.
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
With kind regards
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
I have seen bird perched of telephone wires. Maybe the magpie is singing a sad song because he/she has no one to talk to. Maybe you should try to find a recording of a magpie singing to add to the poem. I have never heard one.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Hi
I have seen bird perched of telephone wires. Maybe the magpie is singing a sad song because he/she has no one to talk to. Maybe you should try to find a recording of a magpie singing to add to the poem. I have never heard one.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
With kind regards
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You are m most welcome.
Joan