Oceanside Morning
Morning along the North Carolina shore.3 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the writing prompt contest. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the artwork you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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This is a very beautiful 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the writing prompt contest. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the artwork you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and for providing encouraging feedback.
Comment from Lindsey Pabst
Great job on your haiku! I love the way you describe the waves as lacy and I also love the metaphor of them kissing the sand. I do wonder what this scene means to you? I wonder if you could write a series of haikus about the scene and delve more into what the experience of watching the sunrise Oceanside means for the viewer.
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Great job on your haiku! I love the way you describe the waves as lacy and I also love the metaphor of them kissing the sand. I do wonder what this scene means to you? I wonder if you could write a series of haikus about the scene and delve more into what the experience of watching the sunrise Oceanside means for the viewer.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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I'm perplex as to why after such positive comments you rated the haiku only 4 stars?
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I feel like though well executed, the poem lacks your perspective. It describes the scene but does not let me know how it makes the author feel.
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Thanks for answering my question. However, I respectfully disagree. I believe the question is how does a poem make the reader feel? Poems are not about the author, but about the reader.
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I updated the rating to five as I don?t feel terribly strongly about this, but the truth is I wish the poem made me feel more than it does. There is a lot I like about the poem but it didn?t move me.
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I will try harder next time. Thanks for your reconsideration.
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
I visited North Carolina and I appreciate this poem. I went to the pier at Topsail Island and completely failed to catch any fish. Beautiful location, though. And this poem brought back that fun memory.
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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I visited North Carolina and I appreciate this poem. I went to the pier at Topsail Island and completely failed to catch any fish. Beautiful location, though. And this poem brought back that fun memory.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Yes, I have had that same disappointment fishing. Thanks for the read and the comments.