Stillness Meditates...
Self-reflective thinking within7 total reviews
Comment from Kelly Louisa Balliu
Your poem highlights the quietness of mind which is reached when engaging in meditation. Here, it is the aspect of being still that is seen as important in guiding introspection. Coupled with the scenery in the image, your words invoke peace and tranquility, which is often evident in your writing.
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Your poem highlights the quietness of mind which is reached when engaging in meditation. Here, it is the aspect of being still that is seen as important in guiding introspection. Coupled with the scenery in the image, your words invoke peace and tranquility, which is often evident in your writing.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Stillness Meditates, has the proper formatting and takes the values of meditation to the readers as the total inner look in the absence of distractions.
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This 5-7-5, Stillness Meditates, has the proper formatting and takes the values of meditation to the readers as the total inner look in the absence of distractions.
Comment Written 27-May-2024
Comment from royowen
What a beautifully calming scene we are enjoying, the thought that relaxing in that environment is positively superb, and I really enjoyed reading it, well done, a good post, good luck, blessings Roy
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What a beautifully calming scene we are enjoying, the thought that relaxing in that environment is positively superb, and I really enjoyed reading it, well done, a good post, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-May-2024
Comment from Stephen Wendt
Very deep for so few words. I had to re-read it a couple of times in order to get the feeling from it. A calming sensation in this poem. Great job, good luck.
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Very deep for so few words. I had to re-read it a couple of times in order to get the feeling from it. A calming sensation in this poem. Great job, good luck.
Comment Written 27-May-2024
Comment from Bridge
A beautiful poem. The words you have chosen are very appropriate. The words echo the thoughts being expressed. Very well written. I wish you the very best in the contest.
With kind regards
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A beautiful poem. The words you have chosen are very appropriate. The words echo the thoughts being expressed. Very well written. I wish you the very best in the contest.
With kind regards
Comment Written 27-May-2024
Comment from Aiona
I like the way the poem personifies "stillness" and "introspection." I counted 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, and 7 syllables in the last line. The prompt says the final line "will have 5 again." But I think it's a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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I like the way the poem personifies "stillness" and "introspection." I counted 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, and 7 syllables in the last line. The prompt says the final line "will have 5 again." But I think it's a lovely poem.
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Aiona,
Thank you for your review. I note the error in the syllable count and revised the 3rd line to 5 syllables per the contest requirements.
All the best,
BermyBye
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Oh wow! I re-read the revised version, and I didn't think it could get prettier, but it did! Stillness is still personified, which is nice. I like the "reflections." It's a double entendre!
Comment from Wendy G
An insight into peace and serenity in amidst the stillness of nature, which definitely invites meditation and introspection when one considers its splendour and grandeur. Well said. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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An insight into peace and serenity in amidst the stillness of nature, which definitely invites meditation and introspection when one considers its splendour and grandeur. Well said. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-May-2024