Lair Of The Seductress
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Katie Kelsey's Pain"Book Four Wolf Bend Series
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Comment from Ulla
Gregg is a conundrum. I can't quite see how he will get out of this one. I know I haven't followed along. I've been to Denmark visiting my family and just wrote an entry for a blind contest.
Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Gregg is a conundrum. I can't quite see how he will get out of this one. I know I haven't followed along. I've been to Denmark visiting my family and just wrote an entry for a blind contest.
Ulla:)))
Comment Written 29-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Good luck in your contest! Thanks for dropping in again. This book is turning out much better than I expected.
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Comment from Soledadpaz
Nice, another whodunnit. I do like mystery thrillers. A few thoughts:
Perhaps: He could make out faint tear streaks on her cheeks.
Suggest: Greg poured himself a whiskey from the bottle on the bar into one of the nearby shot glasses. Delete: in front of them.
Would he check to make sure the safety was on before he put it in his jacket?
Should this be: bear tattoo?
Unclear: She sucked back another one and raised his glass to his lips, which he drank.
Is this his POV of hers? Is she raising his glass?
Is it her hand that unclips his badge? If his fingers aren't functioning?
Sol
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Nice, another whodunnit. I do like mystery thrillers. A few thoughts:
Perhaps: He could make out faint tear streaks on her cheeks.
Suggest: Greg poured himself a whiskey from the bottle on the bar into one of the nearby shot glasses. Delete: in front of them.
Would he check to make sure the safety was on before he put it in his jacket?
Should this be: bear tattoo?
Unclear: She sucked back another one and raised his glass to his lips, which he drank.
Is this his POV of hers? Is she raising his glass?
Is it her hand that unclips his badge? If his fingers aren't functioning?
Sol
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Well, Ma'am, I certainly missed your great assistance! You are awesome!
Comment from royowen
It seem Greg is a bit of a fool, and I thought his senses would have been alerted, but no, I don't think he's thinking clearly at all. Definitely not, where to from here, surely Lilith can't do much with an unconscious man, well done Dougles, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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It seem Greg is a bit of a fool, and I thought his senses would have been alerted, but no, I don't think he's thinking clearly at all. Definitely not, where to from here, surely Lilith can't do much with an unconscious man, well done Dougles, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Seems he was blinded
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Of course
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Well done
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Greg has to resist her. I am sure he will somehow, but I have no clue how he's going to do it. I am sure you have something worked out. I really enjoyed reading and couldn't find any way to improve this post.
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Greg has to resist her. I am sure he will somehow, but I have no clue how he's going to do it. I am sure you have something worked out. I really enjoyed reading and couldn't find any way to improve this post.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. Greg is in a bit of a pickle now. Why are so good to me? Appreciate your kindness.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, you've certainly left us on a knife edge! How does he get out of this one? And no suspicion originally of who she really was (dramatic irony?). You built the drama up beautifully as he played completely into her hands. Can he hold out enough against her supernatural powers? Or does he have back-up from his colleagues? Well done, Doug! Debbie
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Well, you've certainly left us on a knife edge! How does he get out of this one? And no suspicion originally of who she really was (dramatic irony?). You built the drama up beautifully as he played completely into her hands. Can he hold out enough against her supernatural powers? Or does he have back-up from his colleagues? Well done, Doug! Debbie
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Thank you. I think the fact that Officer Kelsey wasn't introduced a couple of books back and I worked her into the crew, I wanted this to be a shocking revelation. At least . . . even with past clues . . .that was what I was going for.
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
Greg had to have had a clue and as a dick he didn't pick up on the booze bottle having strange language. Not too smart as a cop, but somehow he cannot lose even under the influence of paralytic liquor, right?
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Greg had to have had a clue and as a dick he didn't pick up on the booze bottle having strange language. Not too smart as a cop, but somehow he cannot lose even under the influence of paralytic liquor, right?
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Things are heating up! Stick with me.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
It's already interesting!
Very nicely written.
But I hate it when the hero has been drugged. (Just kiddin'!)
It does give him an added hurdle, though.
Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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It's already interesting!
Very nicely written.
But I hate it when the hero has been drugged. (Just kiddin'!)
It does give him an added hurdle, though.
Good luck with it.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. I appreciate you.
