Ruckus
100 words6 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
This sounds like a crazy household. This is what it is like for a family with kids getting ready in the mornings. Sometimes it seems like there is no peace. YOu brought that across well.
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This sounds like a crazy household. This is what it is like for a family with kids getting ready in the mornings. Sometimes it seems like there is no peace. YOu brought that across well.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Ruckus, has the proper word count and finds that the mouse pop has no better time than anyone else in this rat race. ................
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This one-hundred-word story, Ruckus, has the proper word count and finds that the mouse pop has no better time than anyone else in this rat race. ................
Comment Written 21-May-2024
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The cat and the mouse game in this story, and it happened within a stressed house. This story reminds me of Tom and Jerry. This might be a comic in the making.
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The cat and the mouse game in this story, and it happened within a stressed house. This story reminds me of Tom and Jerry. This might be a comic in the making.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh great! Love the twist at the end which came as such a surprise merged with Aww how sweet! The visual is superb and complements the mini-world well. This is original and memorable! Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Oh great! Love the twist at the end which came as such a surprise merged with Aww how sweet! The visual is superb and complements the mini-world well. This is original and memorable! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 21-May-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your short story captures a busy morning in a family so well! I love how each family member adds to the noise. Dad's outburst was so funny! I love the sudden hush that follows! Is the threat that the cat outside will eat them? haha This was such a fun and enjoyable read. Great job!
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Your short story captures a busy morning in a family so well! I love how each family member adds to the noise. Dad's outburst was so funny! I love the sudden hush that follows! Is the threat that the cat outside will eat them? haha This was such a fun and enjoyable read. Great job!
Comment Written 21-May-2024
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, interesting. In this 'story' I recommend editing it for run-on sentences. That middle one seems way too long and grammatically incorrect. Other than that, I wish you good luck in the contest.
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Hmm, interesting. In this 'story' I recommend editing it for run-on sentences. That middle one seems way too long and grammatically incorrect. Other than that, I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2024