Twin Peaks
Nine year old boys growing up fast.2 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Twin Peaks
These tiny poems are really hard to critique
It looks like a great entry for the contest good luck with that
I know the photo portrays two nine year olds. I just think a poem should be the crux of the matter. What if you made the first line TURNING TEN. Exactly ten words
Well, done! Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
Hi Twin Peaks
These tiny poems are really hard to critique
It looks like a great entry for the contest good luck with that
I know the photo portrays two nine year olds. I just think a poem should be the crux of the matter. What if you made the first line TURNING TEN. Exactly ten words
Well, done! Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you, Pamusart. Your suggestion would improve the poem, but would breach the entry rules - under ten words. Kind regards.
Comment from Mark Jackson
I really want to vote for this but I was stopped entirely because of my belief that the teenage years start at 13. They always did when I was that age if it has changed it is nonsense. Sorry.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
I really want to vote for this but I was stopped entirely because of my belief that the teenage years start at 13. They always did when I was that age if it has changed it is nonsense. Sorry.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thanks, Mark. Yeah, you?re right. But that was the core of the disagreement between the twins and their mom. They wanted to believe ten was the start of teenage (as did many of my schoolmates at that age) but Mom knew better and put them right. Cheers.
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Sorry I didn't get that, too late now, I was going to vote for you. Balls.