Garden Treasure
An exciting find while planting a bush.3 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
I truly enjoyed reading this really great writing prompt entry. You such great descriptive words and I was so into it all the way until the end. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I truly enjoyed reading this really great writing prompt entry. You such great descriptive words and I was so into it all the way until the end. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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So, pleased you liked the story. Thank you for the read and feedback.
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You are so welcome!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Okay, now Harry, you know that I love our burgeoning friendship and your writing, but this one, for me, falls short. I tell you this so that you can possibly make some adjustments with it before people enter the polls.
First, I LOVE the premise!! It had my imagination just soaring. In fact, I contemplated leaving the rest of the story til later while I went out to my own garden with a spade and a heart filled with hope for an equal find!!
You actually spent more time describing Mary's life (banker husband, the specific instructions from the plant guy where she bought the hydrangeas (PS - note spelling) and her gardening outfit and coffee habits) rather than on the contents of the fabulous garden find! That, you glossed over...but THAT is the real "story" here. The words of the woman who owned the house before are where the intrigue of your story lies. And I was so hoping you would somehow bring it back to Mary's current life: like, her husband would come home having been fired from some kind of 'war' in the banking industry or there was a hold-up that day or he was going to have to go to another city for a few months in order to get a promotion, and Mary could tie it in with all she'd learned from an afternoon of reading the journal.
This story is like Mary's house: it has great bones and a fabulous history. Focus on those, and you'll have a big-time hit here!!
xoxox
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Okay, now Harry, you know that I love our burgeoning friendship and your writing, but this one, for me, falls short. I tell you this so that you can possibly make some adjustments with it before people enter the polls.
First, I LOVE the premise!! It had my imagination just soaring. In fact, I contemplated leaving the rest of the story til later while I went out to my own garden with a spade and a heart filled with hope for an equal find!!
You actually spent more time describing Mary's life (banker husband, the specific instructions from the plant guy where she bought the hydrangeas (PS - note spelling) and her gardening outfit and coffee habits) rather than on the contents of the fabulous garden find! That, you glossed over...but THAT is the real "story" here. The words of the woman who owned the house before are where the intrigue of your story lies. And I was so hoping you would somehow bring it back to Mary's current life: like, her husband would come home having been fired from some kind of 'war' in the banking industry or there was a hold-up that day or he was going to have to go to another city for a few months in order to get a promotion, and Mary could tie it in with all she'd learned from an afternoon of reading the journal.
This story is like Mary's house: it has great bones and a fabulous history. Focus on those, and you'll have a big-time hit here!!
xoxox
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Deeply appreciate your time and your words of wisdom. I will carefully consider and re-edit. Thanks for your valuable suggestions. I have no more nominations, but your review surely deserves one. Thanks again. xoxox
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What a lovely thing to say. Thank you. xo
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You are welcome.
Comment from RodG
I like how you responded to this prompt in an unexpected--yet believable--manner. Mary finds the diary off her Civil War counterpart Eliza and spends the afternoon reading about events that took place more than 150 years ago. I think your ending would be stronger if we learned if Eliza's husband survived the war. Still, I enjoyed your story. Rod
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I like how you responded to this prompt in an unexpected--yet believable--manner. Mary finds the diary off her Civil War counterpart Eliza and spends the afternoon reading about events that took place more than 150 years ago. I think your ending would be stronger if we learned if Eliza's husband survived the war. Still, I enjoyed your story. Rod
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and for the feedback. I will consider your suggestion. Thanks.
