Nourishment
4 line poem contest entry (1/5/5/9)10 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
So different to my memories of family dinners fifty years ago. He who shouted loudest prevailed. We had five kids aged between ten and nineteen seated at our table, with our father half loaded after a couple of beers and our Mum trying to maintain peace. We ate fast and vacated our spot as quickly as possible. And hopefully, unbruised. Perhaps exaggerated just a bit.
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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So different to my memories of family dinners fifty years ago. He who shouted loudest prevailed. We had five kids aged between ten and nineteen seated at our table, with our father half loaded after a couple of beers and our Mum trying to maintain peace. We ate fast and vacated our spot as quickly as possible. And hopefully, unbruised. Perhaps exaggerated just a bit.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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LOL - I think many of us also had times similar to those you describe around the table! Thank you for sharing the flip side and for the stars :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from juliaSjames
Beautiful short write that works at several levels. It can be read as a description of the ideal family life of bygone days, which is borne out by the nostalgic illustration. Using the "kitchen table" as a metaphor, it can also serve as a reminder of the enduring value of simple things in a world where television and social media are constantly pushing consumerism in everything from household items to clothes and toiletries to pharmaceuticals as the panacea for all ills. And if one were to zero in on "conversation" then this becomes a gentle reminder that, at dinner time, mobile phones need to be set aside in order to facilitate human connection.
I wish you well in the contest.
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Beautiful short write that works at several levels. It can be read as a description of the ideal family life of bygone days, which is borne out by the nostalgic illustration. Using the "kitchen table" as a metaphor, it can also serve as a reminder of the enduring value of simple things in a world where television and social media are constantly pushing consumerism in everything from household items to clothes and toiletries to pharmaceuticals as the panacea for all ills. And if one were to zero in on "conversation" then this becomes a gentle reminder that, at dinner time, mobile phones need to be set aside in order to facilitate human connection.
I wish you well in the contest.
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Hi Julia :)
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback - I really appreciate you delving in :) We don't bring tech to the table either, it's a non negotiable. Hope you have a lovely day.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Meal times when the family get together is always exciting and satisfying. I used to love those times when my family were younger and we all ate together, a fine post Debra, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Meal times when the family get together is always exciting and satisfying. I used to love those times when my family were younger and we all ate together, a fine post Debra, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Hi Dolly :)
Thank you so much for your kind feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed reading my poem. For us, Sunday is the day for family meals around the table nowadays as it's the only day we all tend to be here.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from lyenochka
Having dinner together is such an important thing to keep a family healthy in body and mind. Well said about the benefits of eating and sharing thoughts together. I really liked "families flourish -
food and conversation shared with love". Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Having dinner together is such an important thing to keep a family healthy in body and mind. Well said about the benefits of eating and sharing thoughts together. I really liked "families flourish -
food and conversation shared with love". Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Hi Helen :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I also appreciate the pump you gifted, very kind of you :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
So gorgeous! I love that 50s? picture in black and white and the way you reflect the scene in your 4 line verse with delightful imagery around the 'kitchen table' which has that rather old-fashioned sense. Also good alliteration with family, flourish and food. In such a short piece, this is all skilfully done. Good luck, Debra. Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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So gorgeous! I love that 50s? picture in black and white and the way you reflect the scene in your 4 line verse with delightful imagery around the 'kitchen table' which has that rather old-fashioned sense. Also good alliteration with family, flourish and food. In such a short piece, this is all skilfully done. Good luck, Debra. Love Debbie x
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Debbie, I?m really glad that you enjoyed it. We always ate at the table together at home. It was an unwritten rule but it was often the best part of the day. I used to love when Shaun, me and the kids would all sit around the table for our meals, now it only happens on a Sunday when we are all together. I miss those days?.
Best wishes as always, Debra xx
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It does give you some freedom though and nice to have Sunday as a special family day. But the increasingly 'empty nest' is always unsettling. Don't worry though, they'll be back:)) How is your mother-in-law? xx
Comment from Bill Schott
This four-line poem, Nourishment, has the proper formatting and helps the readers see that the scheduled family meal "nourishes" in many ways beyond food.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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This four-line poem, Nourishment, has the proper formatting and helps the readers see that the scheduled family meal "nourishes" in many ways beyond food.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Bill :) Thank you for your kind feedback. Best wishes, Debra
Comment from patcelaw
This is beautifully worded and a very real thing. I think that's one of the things that is missing in family life today is that families are not eating at the kitchen table and having conversations as much as they used to. I wish there was a time when families would do more of this because I think our children are being short change by not having that in their lives. Patricia.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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This is beautifully worded and a very real thing. I think that's one of the things that is missing in family life today is that families are not eating at the kitchen table and having conversations as much as they used to. I wish there was a time when families would do more of this because I think our children are being short change by not having that in their lives. Patricia.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Patricia, Thank you for your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Debra.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration create
a good word picture at the kitchen table.
-A very good concluding line that shows
how "families flourish."
-A good entry; good luck!!
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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-Nice image and presentation, Debra.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration create
a good word picture at the kitchen table.
-A very good concluding line that shows
how "families flourish."
-A good entry; good luck!!
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Pam, thank you for your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)
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You are very welcome, Debra.
Comment from Sally Law
Debra dear,
This is a great poem in this tidy little form, my friend. I won this contest once and not sure why. It's a rather difficult form; but you look to have it well in hand. Beautifully written and illustrated.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sal Xo's
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Debra dear,
This is a great poem in this tidy little form, my friend. I won this contest once and not sure why. It's a rather difficult form; but you look to have it well in hand. Beautifully written and illustrated.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sal Xo's
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Sal :) I hope you're well :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. Best wishes as always, Debra x
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You are most welcome. I've bee sick but finally got to the doctor this week and hopefully on the mend.
So sorry about the rude review you received. Extra hugs.
She obviously hasn't learned her reviewing manners.
Blessings, my friend.
Sal Xoxo
Comment from Acacia2
I mean this is a great statement or fact for many, I just think there was really not a point in reading it which makes me sad. It made me feel no emotion or want to read more. It left me thinking what the heck is this? I'm sorry for the harsh criticism I encourage you to write about something that really inspires you or something from a place of pain so we can feel you. Good luck.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I mean this is a great statement or fact for many, I just think there was really not a point in reading it which makes me sad. It made me feel no emotion or want to read more. It left me thinking what the heck is this? I'm sorry for the harsh criticism I encourage you to write about something that really inspires you or something from a place of pain so we can feel you. Good luck.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi :)
There's constructive criticism and then there's rudeness - I appreciate the first, I tolerate the second...
Please, when you find yourself thinking 'there's really not a point reading this' or 'What the heck is this?' Just press skip and bite your tongue - you could genuinely hurt someone's feelings with such harsh flippancy. Luckily, I'm not that person :)
I hope your day improves.
Kind regards, Debra
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I?m sorry truly I read it when I was already angry and having a horrible day
