Comment from Mark Jackson

Excellent

I like this but I think you are suffering from reaching the word count and deleting a couple of words. Since I created this contest I can tell you there are no disqualifications. If you wanted to add 2-3 words no one would notice. Good luck.

 Comment Written 12-May-2024

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reply by the author on 12-May-2024

Thanks for the tip. I will review.

reply by Mark Jackson on 12-May-2024

Since being disqualified for writing in Allegory in a competition I expressly stated you may write in allegory I will never use the incompetent contest committee again. My complaint was even ignored.

reply by the author on 12-May-2024

Love your challenges. Hope you continue.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Ah, yes, you can't beat the old transplanted organ of a killer scenario! lol

"Is it you," Suzy asked - you should probably have a question mark in there.

Spot on with the word count. This may be more of a horror bent than a science fiction one but most folk won't notice.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 12-May-2024

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reply by the author on 12-May-2024

I will review. Thanks for the feedback.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Hmm, the heart of a killer in a transplant, that takes over the new host body at night, and continues to kill. This is written well. But the premise is a very well used one in many stories, movies and TV episodes, with eyes, hands, heart, etc.

Good luck.

 Comment Written 12-May-2024

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reply by the author on 12-May-2024

Thanks, I realize it is an old theme. But what the heck. Thanks for the read and feedback.