Hit And Run.
My entry for the Cognitive Dissonance contest.3 total reviews
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine story, Hull, and one that again is a character study of human behavior under stress, and a study of human moral response. We'd all like to believe WE'D do the right thing, but...
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Another fine story, Hull, and one that again is a character study of human behavior under stress, and a study of human moral response. We'd all like to believe WE'D do the right thing, but...
Comment Written 26-May-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is such an emotionally charged story. You drew me into Amy's world and the moral dilemma she faces. The contrast between her initial excitement about a potential promotion and the abrupt shift in her circumstances after witnessing the hit-and-run incident is shocking.
You've done such a good job of capturing her internal struggle. The tension builds steadily and this easily kept my interest. Great job!
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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This is such an emotionally charged story. You drew me into Amy's world and the moral dilemma she faces. The contrast between her initial excitement about a potential promotion and the abrupt shift in her circumstances after witnessing the hit-and-run incident is shocking.
You've done such a good job of capturing her internal struggle. The tension builds steadily and this easily kept my interest. Great job!
Comment Written 12-May-2024
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Thank you so much for reading and for the encouraging review.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, while you have an interesting story. In the future, you may want to show vs. tell. Your story is all telling or narrative. Also, and this isn't your fault as the contest creator is exactly correct on the definition of Cognitive Dissonance. But your MC doesn't display this. Good luck.
notes:
"What about {notice?"} No notice, no return of deposit."
-"What about notice? No notice, no return of deposit."
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Hmm, while you have an interesting story. In the future, you may want to show vs. tell. Your story is all telling or narrative. Also, and this isn't your fault as the contest creator is exactly correct on the definition of Cognitive Dissonance. But your MC doesn't display this. Good luck.
notes:
"What about {notice?"} No notice, no return of deposit."
-"What about notice? No notice, no return of deposit."
Comment Written 12-May-2024
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
