Train to Treblinka
A young woman's attempt to avoid Nazi enslavement.4 total reviews
Comment from zanya
This is a story for the contest that is well told with a sense the reality of those difficult war years but also it demonstrates the extraordinary courage shown by people-has my vote,
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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This is a story for the contest that is well told with a sense the reality of those difficult war years but also it demonstrates the extraordinary courage shown by people-has my vote,
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and again for the six star honor.
Comment from Claire Tennant
This is a wonderful story that inspires courage and, for me, does not cause the shed tears that the Nazi regime stories usually do. It's formatted almost like a thriller right to the end. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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This is a wonderful story that inspires courage and, for me, does not cause the shed tears that the Nazi regime stories usually do. It's formatted almost like a thriller right to the end. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and provide encouraging feedback.
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You are most welcome
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Harry, this is not a reply. It is a simple message of Congratulations! A most deserving win
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
All requirements met for the competition which is always nice.
It's an affecting piece and sadly these things happened.
The story is mainly telling with not a lot of showing present. It's the predominance of words such as were/was/had that give it that feel. Writing around these can allow the reader in more, making it more direct and more of an immersive experience.
and scampered to the tree line.- treeline could be a single word her.
lost loved ones to the Nazis brutes.- Nazi brutes
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Hi there,
All requirements met for the competition which is always nice.
It's an affecting piece and sadly these things happened.
The story is mainly telling with not a lot of showing present. It's the predominance of words such as were/was/had that give it that feel. Writing around these can allow the reader in more, making it more direct and more of an immersive experience.
and scampered to the tree line.- treeline could be a single word her.
lost loved ones to the Nazis brutes.- Nazi brutes
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Hey, thanks. I will review and edit. Comments appreciated.
Comment from Julie Helms
This is a strong story of a very brave woman. Your writing clearly highlights the horrible conditions on the transports and the terror of what these people knew lay ahead. A great entry for the prompt.
Julie
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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This is a strong story of a very brave woman. Your writing clearly highlights the horrible conditions on the transports and the terror of what these people knew lay ahead. A great entry for the prompt.
Julie
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for the read and feedback.
