Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I'm reading this as the force of the winds were, luckily, at teenager strength which, of course, would be damaging and frightening enough to go through. A good choice for this 5-7-5 'air' challenge. Good luck with it,
cheers

 Comment Written 05-May-2024

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reply by the author on 06-May-2024

Thanks, Valda. I had fun with this one, having raised three daughters and now witnessing four granddaughters storm through their teenage years.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

this may we laugh this morning on reading. The denouement in the last line is very apt and also very clever. Great job with this one.

hope it does well.
Al the best
GMG

 Comment Written 05-May-2024

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reply by the author on 06-May-2024

Thank you for enjoying this one too.

Comment from Mark Jackson

Excellent

This is good but I think it could be better. I spent too long (seconds) trying to work out why your second line begins with force. Then I realised the hyphen was to indicate enjambment and not a pause. I feel this would be better if you kept the word Force the same size as Hurricane, it will be a bold choice but I think it will not only clarify meaning but look confident.

 Comment Written 05-May-2024

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reply by the author on 07-May-2024

Thank you, Mark, for reading with care and making the suggestion. The contest was over before I had a chance to make the change.