The Dark Veil
A lost love3 total reviews
Comment from karenina
The content is mesmerizing. I am caught up in the "story" and instantly felt an emotional investment in the telling...
Great lines here.
"all alone, she staggered closer, and stared at the infinite water,
then moved inside it and felt its power."
Wow.
This one will stay with me the rest of the day.
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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The content is mesmerizing. I am caught up in the "story" and instantly felt an emotional investment in the telling...
Great lines here.
"all alone, she staggered closer, and stared at the infinite water,
then moved inside it and felt its power."
Wow.
This one will stay with me the rest of the day.
Karenina
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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This was an eerie one. Thanks for enjoying it!
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I love the broad range of your themes...
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is so beautiful. It brings to me a sense of loss. The repetition of "her blush pink gown hid her nervous feet" at the beginning and end creates a perfect frame for the poem. I love your word choices and imagery. From the "messy curls framed his distant eyes" to the "bright moon reflected painful, grieving eyes," each line is filled with emotion.
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Your poem is so beautiful. It brings to me a sense of loss. The repetition of "her blush pink gown hid her nervous feet" at the beginning and end creates a perfect frame for the poem. I love your word choices and imagery. From the "messy curls framed his distant eyes" to the "bright moon reflected painful, grieving eyes," each line is filled with emotion.
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate it!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is definitely sad and raw with a love story that has gone horribly wrong. The force of this tragedy is captured in that bold print, punchy sentences/sentiments and the imagery of dark and gloom, concluding with the bride's walk into the powerful sea. This is contrasted with the delicacy of the colour and descriptive detail in the repeated line. Nicely done! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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This is definitely sad and raw with a love story that has gone horribly wrong. The force of this tragedy is captured in that bold print, punchy sentences/sentiments and the imagery of dark and gloom, concluding with the bride's walk into the powerful sea. This is contrasted with the delicacy of the colour and descriptive detail in the repeated line. Nicely done! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you so much! You understood every aspect of my poem.