The Hyacinth Twin
One should never assume.2 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This half-dialogue, The Hyacinth Twin, leaves me a bit confused though the main thrust is the unheard side of the telephone call has dialed a wrong number.
First disqualification is the set up in the first paragraph. The rules say we see nothing but dialogue. That includes "she listened" which is not dialogue.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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This half-dialogue, The Hyacinth Twin, leaves me a bit confused though the main thrust is the unheard side of the telephone call has dialed a wrong number.
First disqualification is the set up in the first paragraph. The rules say we see nothing but dialogue. That includes "she listened" which is not dialogue.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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This third failure in half dialogue has been deleted
Comment from Julie Helms
Calling the president accidentally makes for good fodder for a humorous conversation! (I hope your character offered him som free advice!)
The contest requires that there is to be no writing outside of the dialog itself, so your first paragraph shouldn't be there. Only everything that is within the quote marks.
Best of luck!
Julie
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Calling the president accidentally makes for good fodder for a humorous conversation! (I hope your character offered him som free advice!)
The contest requires that there is to be no writing outside of the dialog itself, so your first paragraph shouldn't be there. Only everything that is within the quote marks.
Best of luck!
Julie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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oops thanks Julie