Urination Declaration
Speaking to Whomever Will Listen7 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Urine luck, I clicked on this one and knew you DEPENDED on a review coming your way. (HA-HA)
My son, at three, would shout out in the park-- "I need to pee a tree!"
It was adorable then.
He's 44 now. Pretty sure it'd get him arrested!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Urine luck, I clicked on this one and knew you DEPENDED on a review coming your way. (HA-HA)
My son, at three, would shout out in the park-- "I need to pee a tree!"
It was adorable then.
He's 44 now. Pretty sure it'd get him arrested!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Nah. As long as he's behind the tree where no one can see, and all he does it drain the lizard, he'll be fine.
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Humor is your middle name!
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Hm. Ha. And here my baptismal names are Thomas first and Paul in between the surname. My confirmation name is William. Ma didn't say anything about Humor but I like it better than Smarty Pants!. Words cannot express my appreciation for the time you have given me this past twelve hours. I feel as if I was being courted again. But as Yorik came to know it will be short-lived if the mrs finds out. Sssh. Don't tell her, please, I still have bruised from the Farberware pan she threw. THANKS.
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My pleasure... And the Mrs. will just be happy your writing is amusing the masses!
Comment from joann r romei
This was adorable and made me chuckle, the bladder can be a problem at any age, ask any woman who birthed children ,lol I love the depends and golden years line.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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This was adorable and made me chuckle, the bladder can be a problem at any age, ask any woman who birthed children ,lol I love the depends and golden years line.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Welcome
To the
Mad, mad, mad, mad, very mad world of Tom
Please visit as time
Permits and thanks for the review
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
First: TMI !
Second: This is a narrative, not a one side heard conversation.
This is one-sided Dialogue:
Hello Handsome how are you today?
Yes, I saw her in that almost dress.
There were so many guys drooling I needed a swim
suit.
Thank you dear, by the way when was your last eye exam?
Honey bunch I am way past the days of wearing a"little" anything.
More to love my aunt fanny, I was just checking in with you.
Yes, I will over to pick you up on Tuesday for our "42"
game over at Cynthia's. I wouldn't miss her fried Chicken for anything.
Love you, see you then. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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First: TMI !
Second: This is a narrative, not a one side heard conversation.
This is one-sided Dialogue:
Hello Handsome how are you today?
Yes, I saw her in that almost dress.
There were so many guys drooling I needed a swim
suit.
Thank you dear, by the way when was your last eye exam?
Honey bunch I am way past the days of wearing a"little" anything.
More to love my aunt fanny, I was just checking in with you.
Yes, I will over to pick you up on Tuesday for our "42"
game over at Cynthia's. I wouldn't miss her fried Chicken for anything.
Love you, see you then. :-)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Message received loud and clear - multiple times.
Mea culpa - no mas - my bad.
It was a misstep - a faux pas and yet...
can't it be seen as speaking with myself?
:-]
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I live to serve. Not really, but it sounds good doesn't it. ? Karen
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Message received loud and clear - multiple times.
Mea culpa - no mas - my bad.
It was a misstep - a faux pas and yet...
can't it be seen as speaking with myself?
:-]
Comment from Bill Schott
This half-dialogue, Urination Declaration, is very entertaining as a free verse poem. As a half-dialogue, however, there is no suggestion of another unheard speaker. The reader is the audience, who is not expected to reply, giving no burden on the author to imply it.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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This half-dialogue, Urination Declaration, is very entertaining as a free verse poem. As a half-dialogue, however, there is no suggestion of another unheard speaker. The reader is the audience, who is not expected to reply, giving no burden on the author to imply it.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Yep. I have been told it was a monologue. Mea culpa. I came, I tried, and seemingly failed, but...
I appreciate your read and comment. Thank you.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I'm not sure if this follows teh rules of the contest. Just thought I'd pass that one. That aside - this was great. I love how you show the carefree nature of your youth. And it appears you haven't changed that much with depends on! I love the way you wrote this. This is fun and honest and so wonderful to read. Good for you! haha
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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I'm not sure if this follows teh rules of the contest. Just thought I'd pass that one. That aside - this was great. I love how you show the carefree nature of your youth. And it appears you haven't changed that much with depends on! I love the way you wrote this. This is fun and honest and so wonderful to read. Good for you! haha
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Yep. I have been told it was a monologue. Mea culpa. I came, I tried, and seemingly failed, but...
I appreciate your read and comment. Thank you.
Comment from Mark Jackson
This was an enjoyable read but I fear it will not meet the requirements for this contest. The prompt stated that this should be a dialogue where only half of the conversation is read. This is first-person narration, as such I do not think it fulfills the brief. Shame it is good reading.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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This was an enjoyable read but I fear it will not meet the requirements for this contest. The prompt stated that this should be a dialogue where only half of the conversation is read. This is first-person narration, as such I do not think it fulfills the brief. Shame it is good reading.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Yep. I have been told it was a monologue. Mea culpa. I came, I tried, and seemingly failed, but...
I appreciate your read and comment. Thank you.
Comment from Julie Helms
This is a funny and clever piece. But it's not a dialogue. A dialogue has two people talking back and forth, and the contest says we can only read what one of them is saying.
You have here a soliloquy or monologue. There's no implied back and forth.
I would suggest buying some fresh tighty-whities!
Julie
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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This is a funny and clever piece. But it's not a dialogue. A dialogue has two people talking back and forth, and the contest says we can only read what one of them is saying.
You have here a soliloquy or monologue. There's no implied back and forth.
I would suggest buying some fresh tighty-whities!
Julie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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That?s okay. I tried. Can?t it be a one way conversation with oneself? Whatever. Life goes on.
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Ehh, the contest isn't monitored so it shall sally forth as is. You'll have fans on the peeing gnome alone.
Best of luck!
