Comment from A.C. Goldman

Excellent

I think this is a really great pirate story chapter. Consider enhancing the dialogue with emotion in place of phrases like "The Captain then said"... Pirates are emotional people and the Reverend must have been a sly fox caught in a trap

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024

Thanks! Good feedback on adding more emotion to the dialogue.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

A well written chapter. The Reverand is now gone. Things look a little bleaker, but we already know the boy will survive. The question now is how did he do it?

notes:

"You lost your {�¢?}"" He bit

- knife?

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024

Thanks! I don't know how I keep missing the gremlins.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Nicely done! I thoughtt his chapter was strong. You really brought me into a a tense and emotionally charged situation aboard the ship. The dialogue feels authentic does a good job in showing us the each character's motivations. This was an enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024

Thanks! Stay tuned for more!

Comment from royowen

Excellent

This is a little different from what I'm used to reading, but a welcome change. A pirate story, they have always been a trifle brutal with their enemies, or their perceived useless ones, the reverend didn't make a sound when he hit the water, but no bible in his articles, well done, beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024

Thanks! Stay tuned for more