Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Waiting for Willis"Young girl with special abilities.
16 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's funny how things stick in our minds, even when we don't think we remember them. I read along enjoying your story, as always; and then, you ended with "They are here," and goose bumps ran all over me. Yes, I know you didn't say "They're here." But it was close enough, and took me back to Heather O'Rourke's line in the Poltergeist. Sadly, the beautiful young lady died before Poltergeist III was released. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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It's funny how things stick in our minds, even when we don't think we remember them. I read along enjoying your story, as always; and then, you ended with "They are here," and goose bumps ran all over me. Yes, I know you didn't say "They're here." But it was close enough, and took me back to Heather O'Rourke's line in the Poltergeist. Sadly, the beautiful young lady died before Poltergeist III was released. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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I certainly do remember that movie. That stupid clown doll scared the hell out of me. The movie seemed so ahead of its time when it was released. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very nerve-wracking situation for Momma and Heddy. You do a good job of showing what they do so that we can see the tension. You also ended on a great cliffhanger.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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This is a very nerve-wracking situation for Momma and Heddy. You do a good job of showing what they do so that we can see the tension. You also ended on a great cliffhanger.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Carol. Appreciate this. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Oh, man, I want to know what happens next. Is Willis coming home? Poor mom was really sad, happy, stressed, hopeful, scared.... so many feelings! I have a son, I understand how she feels.
Well done, another great chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Oh, man, I want to know what happens next. Is Willis coming home? Poor mom was really sad, happy, stressed, hopeful, scared.... so many feelings! I have a son, I understand how she feels.
Well done, another great chapter.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Gypsy. Your review was so nice and the sixth star was a bonus. Gretchen
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Rejoining a military person who has been gone for a long period of time can be a scary proposition for young children like Heddy. It also requires a readjustment period for everyone involved.
Big brothers are supposed to be "kind of mean" to younger siblings. It is all part of family life.
Willis returning helps move the storyline along.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Rejoining a military person who has been gone for a long period of time can be a scary proposition for young children like Heddy. It also requires a readjustment period for everyone involved.
Big brothers are supposed to be "kind of mean" to younger siblings. It is all part of family life.
Willis returning helps move the storyline along.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Siblings can be very mean. I'm sure they are all going to be adjusting. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can understand the nervousness of the wait. I can't wait until your next post. I want Willis home. Thank you for sharing.
He squats down next to my bed and brushes my hair off of my cheek. (you can omit 'down', squats covers it.)
he happiness in his voice as he said "you're doing it, Heddy. ("You're)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I can understand the nervousness of the wait. I can't wait until your next post. I want Willis home. Thank you for sharing.
He squats down next to my bed and brushes my hair off of my cheek. (you can omit 'down', squats covers it.)
he happiness in his voice as he said "you're doing it, Heddy. ("You're)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. I'm so happy you like this. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
I'm simply loving this story, Gretchen. I don't know why I'm feeling dread. I'm hoping for happy events, but that's not always the case in real life especially not in fiction. I can't figure out my science of dread, though. Lol
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I'm simply loving this story, Gretchen. I don't know why I'm feeling dread. I'm hoping for happy events, but that's not always the case in real life especially not in fiction. I can't figure out my science of dread, though. Lol
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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There has to be some heart break so you know that's coming. Feeling dread is appropriate. Thank you. I'm tickled you are enjoying this story. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Two years is a long time to be away from family. During the Pandemic I didn't see my family for 18 months as I was isolated abroad and couldn't get home, it was awful. When I finally battled to get a flight home there were tears at the airport when I was welcomed back. There is nothing more important than family Gretchen. Your sensitive post is touching and I can't wait for the next chapter. Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Two years is a long time to be away from family. During the Pandemic I didn't see my family for 18 months as I was isolated abroad and couldn't get home, it was awful. When I finally battled to get a flight home there were tears at the airport when I was welcomed back. There is nothing more important than family Gretchen. Your sensitive post is touching and I can't wait for the next chapter. Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. That must have been torture. The pandemic definitely left its indelible mark on the world. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
I just wish you hadn't stopped there! But it was a very clever place to stop - of course I'll be back. You portrayed very well her mother's nervous anxiety and the dialogue was very well done. The climax - I just hope he will be okay, but I fear he will have PTSD. looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I just wish you hadn't stopped there! But it was a very clever place to stop - of course I'll be back. You portrayed very well her mother's nervous anxiety and the dialogue was very well done. The climax - I just hope he will be okay, but I fear he will have PTSD. looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy. I had to stop it there. It would have been too long. Lol. I really can't thank you enough for the sixth star. Gretchen
Comment from Teri7
This was a very interesting and well written chapter. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue. I look forward to your next writing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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This was a very interesting and well written chapter. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue. I look forward to your next writing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Teri. I appreciate this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
this was outstanding gal. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I can imagine that Heddy's mom would be on edge waiting, especially after so long of a time worrying about Willis. The dialogue between Heddy and her mom over who's winning at checkers was priceless. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
this was outstanding gal. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I can imagine that Heddy's mom would be on edge waiting, especially after so long of a time worrying about Willis. The dialogue between Heddy and her mom over who's winning at checkers was priceless. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Tom. Your review made my night. I appreciate the kind words and the six. Gretchen
