The House We Feared
The old house and the old man that scared us to death15 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, I hear people saying that story is about plot, theme, character, or a combination, but story is truly about emotions. And you, sir, have pulled my strings like a marionettist or puppeteer, whichever they are called.
Great story! Thanks for sharing. I wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Wow, I hear people saying that story is about plot, theme, character, or a combination, but story is truly about emotions. And you, sir, have pulled my strings like a marionettist or puppeteer, whichever they are called.
Great story! Thanks for sharing. I wish I had a six.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you do much. I love writing and its reviews like yours that keeps me going!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This story begins as a creepy tale, but evolves into a Halloween story and then into a story of happiness, joy, caring, and love. Your descriptions are vivid, and dialogue realistic. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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This story begins as a creepy tale, but evolves into a Halloween story and then into a story of happiness, joy, caring, and love. Your descriptions are vivid, and dialogue realistic. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind words. I really appreciate it!
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Thank you so much for the kind words. I really appreciate it!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a heartfelt story. You've shared the friendship beautifully. I love how the old house goes from a symbol of terror to a friendship between the young boy and Mr. Lick. The twist of the story is so touching. Great job!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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What a heartfelt story. You've shared the friendship beautifully. I love how the old house goes from a symbol of terror to a friendship between the young boy and Mr. Lick. The twist of the story is so touching. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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uThank you so much for the generous review. It is appreciated!!
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uThank you so much for the generous review. It is appreciated!!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I would say that old farmhouse probably has already too much history. The shutters and the creepy creaky front gate at a lot to the ambience. Also the thing that's really good is this is being told through kids perspective and experience. You have done such an excellent job describing his face and hair that it would be easy for someone who sketches to do it. This was a poignant moment: "I felt sad for the old man. "I am Donny."
He smiled; "I am George Lick."
I could see a smile on his face. Turning around, I yelled to my buddies."Get up here! Mr. Lick is giving out real size Hershey bars." This has a lovely ending.
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I would say that old farmhouse probably has already too much history. The shutters and the creepy creaky front gate at a lot to the ambience. Also the thing that's really good is this is being told through kids perspective and experience. You have done such an excellent job describing his face and hair that it would be easy for someone who sketches to do it. This was a poignant moment: "I felt sad for the old man. "I am Donny."
He smiled; "I am George Lick."
I could see a smile on his face. Turning around, I yelled to my buddies."Get up here! Mr. Lick is giving out real size Hershey bars." This has a lovely ending.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I enjoy writing and words like yours encourage me to continue. Thank you!
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Great skill for description
Comment from BunnyS
This is such a good story! It made me smile and made me tear up...what else can you ask for? :) There were a couple of punctuation issues, but they didn't take away from the story at all.
I loved the descriptions of the house and the old man. I could picture everything so clearly as I read your story. I have a huge amount of respect for those who serve, so having two military guys in your story made it a winner right off the bat. Well done!! Good luck in the contest!
Thank you for your service!!
Bunny
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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This is such a good story! It made me smile and made me tear up...what else can you ask for? :) There were a couple of punctuation issues, but they didn't take away from the story at all.
I loved the descriptions of the house and the old man. I could picture everything so clearly as I read your story. I have a huge amount of respect for those who serve, so having two military guys in your story made it a winner right off the bat. Well done!! Good luck in the contest!
Thank you for your service!!
Bunny
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I enjoy writing and words like yours encourage me to continue. Thank you!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice story, even if a bit predictable.
So none of the other boys were interested in making friends?
You might want to combine paragraphs 2 and 3, and then 3 and 4 for clarity.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Very nice story, even if a bit predictable.
So none of the other boys were interested in making friends?
You might want to combine paragraphs 2 and 3, and then 3 and 4 for clarity.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Thanks Wayne! I appreciate your suggestions. Although fiction there was a house in our neighborhood that had all the kids scared. Lol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You got my last star. What a lovely story. Creepy, then heartfelt. Humor, nostalgia, war, and family. All of this rolled up into one grand tale. Go to Pinterest for pictures they have everything. Spoiler Alert! You can lose time looking at happy babies. They never fail to lift my spirit. Just mention them in you author notes and they are free. Karen
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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You got my last star. What a lovely story. Creepy, then heartfelt. Humor, nostalgia, war, and family. All of this rolled up into one grand tale. Go to Pinterest for pictures they have everything. Spoiler Alert! You can lose time looking at happy babies. They never fail to lift my spirit. Just mention them in you author notes and they are free. Karen
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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Why thank you on the last star!! Much appreciated. I enjoyed writing this one. We had an old house in the neighborhood that none of us tough guys got the courage to go up to tricker or treat. Yet, I grew up and became a cop??? Two of my buddies became firemen. THank God we got over the fear of that old house. Lol
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I was never afraid if anything, well except for mummies. They come out of the closet at night to get you. Other than that I was brave. :-)
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Hi Karen,
My story is up for voting. Appreciate it if you could give me a vote.
Thanks, Richard
Comment from Neonewman
Great entry for this particular writing prompt! I think most of us had a house in our neighborhood or nearby that sent goosebumps up our spine. I enjoyed the read and wish you the best in the contest.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Great entry for this particular writing prompt! I think most of us had a house in our neighborhood or nearby that sent goosebumps up our spine. I enjoyed the read and wish you the best in the contest.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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You are correct about scary houses. We had one in our neighborhood. Unlike Donny, we were to afraid to even go to the door.
Thank you for the kind words about the story.
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My pleasure.
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Hi,
My story is up for a vote. If you think it is worthy of your vote. I would appreciate it. Richard
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The vote has ended already, I would've definitely voted for it. I work 12 hour days.
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Not a problem. Twelve hour days run in our family. Our daughter is a nurse as are two nieces.
Comment from Begin Again
Neer judge a book nor a person by the cover.... Underneath that scary facade was a man who gave his all for his country and family and was left alone until Donny came along and gave him purpose once again. Wonderful!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Neer judge a book nor a person by the cover.... Underneath that scary facade was a man who gave his all for his country and family and was left alone until Donny came along and gave him purpose once again. Wonderful!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Thank you so much for the review. It is greatly appreciated. I love your reference to book by its cover. My father raised his boys not to judge anyone until you know them.
Thanks again!
Comment from EeanBlack
I knew a guy named Paul. He had nobody and every old car you could imagine. My dad had died years ago, so I introduced him to my mom. they were friends until his death three years later. His daughter that nobody even knew about came and sold everything. She said it meant nothing to her. I never asked her their backstory.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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I knew a guy named Paul. He had nobody and every old car you could imagine. My dad had died years ago, so I introduced him to my mom. they were friends until his death three years later. His daughter that nobody even knew about came and sold everything. She said it meant nothing to her. I never asked her their backstory.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the review and rating. What a sad story you wrote about. I wish yours had happy end like mine.
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This story is up for voting. I would appreciate your vote. Richard