Silent Voices
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "What Haunts a Ghost "Verses of personification
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Comment from lyenochka
That's a great mission for a writer - to speak for those who cannot speak for themselves. And I like how you leave it up to the reader as to who are the owners of the silent voices. It's a noble muse to have!
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That's a great mission for a writer - to speak for those who cannot speak for themselves. And I like how you leave it up to the reader as to who are the owners of the silent voices. It's a noble muse to have!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from gansach
I really like this poem. Your choice of art to illustrate it is excellent. Your rhymes flow so naturally, they just feel so right for what you are expressing. It's descriptive and presents a picture to the mind of the reader as well as translating your feelings to strike a chord inside. Wonderful effort.
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I really like this poem. Your choice of art to illustrate it is excellent. Your rhymes flow so naturally, they just feel so right for what you are expressing. It's descriptive and presents a picture to the mind of the reader as well as translating your feelings to strike a chord inside. Wonderful effort.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
Comment from Jim Wile
I enjoyed this well-written statement about keeping a secret, for that's sort of what holding back your words is. This is a skill more people should practice, which would lead to a lot less hurt feelings. Sometimes the kindest words are those left unsaid.
I enjoyed the iambic trimeter of this poem, which isn't very common, but it worked well here. I wasn't too fond of "made heard," though. What would you think of either "their life" or "at home" instead? - Jim
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed this well-written statement about keeping a secret, for that's sort of what holding back your words is. This is a skill more people should practice, which would lead to a lot less hurt feelings. Sometimes the kindest words are those left unsaid.
I enjoyed the iambic trimeter of this poem, which isn't very common, but it worked well here. I wasn't too fond of "made heard," though. What would you think of either "their life" or "at home" instead? - Jim
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much, MM!
Xo
Comment from GoWiSt
"What Haunts a Ghost" Interesting paradoxical title.
Nice reading flow and abab rhyme scheme.
"They gather at each seam
to tug my slow unravel." I like this metaphoric imagery.
Wow! All that came from drinking waters from your well?? Can I have some? "-))
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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"What Haunts a Ghost" Interesting paradoxical title.
Nice reading flow and abab rhyme scheme.
"They gather at each seam
to tug my slow unravel." I like this metaphoric imagery.
Wow! All that came from drinking waters from your well?? Can I have some? "-))
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Lol! Thank you so much!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an eerie write Jessica, words we left unspoken and now they echo in the wind like ghostly whispers. There is much I did not say to my Father before he died and I know my siblings feel the same way, but we kept silent. A poigant post and I think a few people will identify with your words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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This is an eerie write Jessica, words we left unspoken and now they echo in the wind like ghostly whispers. There is much I did not say to my Father before he died and I know my siblings feel the same way, but we kept silent. A poigant post and I think a few people will identify with your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your always kind and insightful words, Dolly. Xo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think at certain time in our lives we all hear those soft murmurs within us. It never occurred to me that not everyone would hear them. Hmm, not you have me thinking. Wonderful poem. Thank you.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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I think at certain time in our lives we all hear those soft murmurs within us. It never occurred to me that not everyone would hear them. Hmm, not you have me thinking. Wonderful poem. Thank you.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Barbara!! Xo
Comment from royowen
I think we all have those silent murmurings in our mind, or even stirrings in the stomach that bothers you. I've had them all, in that well known mix they call life, as always a fabulous post Jessica, very neat, articulate, blessings. Roy
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I think we all have those silent murmurings in our mind, or even stirrings in the stomach that bothers you. I've had them all, in that well known mix they call life, as always a fabulous post Jessica, very neat, articulate, blessings. Roy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
Comment from Mark Jackson
I enjoyed reading that but it was the final stanza that was truly excellent. I absolutely love that idea of being a ghost of thoughts not expressed. I might just be the opposite to this as I am haunted by the things I said but wish I did not. This is truly a haunting piece of writing.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed reading that but it was the final stanza that was truly excellent. I absolutely love that idea of being a ghost of thoughts not expressed. I might just be the opposite to this as I am haunted by the things I said but wish I did not. This is truly a haunting piece of writing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you, I'm thrilled you enjoyed it!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
How is it that you give me chills every time I finally have the time to get over here to read some of your lovely posts. Wow, this was amazing and I love that haunted by a host and then become a ghost. It is beautifully eerie, and yet makes sense to me. As someone who suffers with musical tinnitus why would anything surprise me?
Your haunting, chilling poem is gorgeous and I am so glad I got here tonight before my sixes were gone.
Also, I am so looking forward to doing your poem coming up so if you could just jot down a couple details about your husband and girl's names and ages, I know they will love to see themselves in a poem for mommy. And a few of your favorite songs or singer or band. Two days before your birthday is fine.
Thanks again, my wonderful friend. This was awesome. Love, Debi
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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How is it that you give me chills every time I finally have the time to get over here to read some of your lovely posts. Wow, this was amazing and I love that haunted by a host and then become a ghost. It is beautifully eerie, and yet makes sense to me. As someone who suffers with musical tinnitus why would anything surprise me?
Your haunting, chilling poem is gorgeous and I am so glad I got here tonight before my sixes were gone.
Also, I am so looking forward to doing your poem coming up so if you could just jot down a couple details about your husband and girl's names and ages, I know they will love to see themselves in a poem for mommy. And a few of your favorite songs or singer or band. Two days before your birthday is fine.
Thanks again, my wonderful friend. This was awesome. Love, Debi
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, my Debi, for the stars and kind words- and the huge smile this morning! I'm so sorry, I've been meaning to send you those details I promise, I'm on it! You are the sweetest and you're right- the girls will love it! Xoxoxo :)
Love ya!
Comment from patcelaw
There are many times in this life when we just need to be quiet and let those solid voices remain. I enjoyed your poem very much. It reads very well when read aloud and your presentation is beautiful thank you. Patricia .
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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There are many times in this life when we just need to be quiet and let those solid voices remain. I enjoyed your poem very much. It reads very well when read aloud and your presentation is beautiful thank you. Patricia .
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
