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Comment from Jumbo J
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi Gypsy Queen,
Erotic--- relating to or tending to arouse sexual desire or excitement.

I'd say you have achieved every definition of said 'erotic' within this beautifully-tasteful crafted story of want, need and passion. And I read in a little that reminded me of the Vampire eternal life association within your last line...
I will love him my whole life and I will search for him in the next one.

Very well done MariVal!
I may need to go and have a cold shower now... but I did enjoy the read... and it will be worth all the shivering... lol.
All the very best wishes in this contest dear lady... ul-la-la!

With our thoughts we create...
insatiable sensations.

Warmest regards,
James.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
    James! It's so good to hear from you, it always is. Thank you for the exceptional six-star review and kind words. I appreciate your insightful feedback.

    I thought my story wasn't erotic enough but I guess I was wrong LoL I had pretty good feedback but not that many people read it. I think the word 'erotic' scares some away. Oh, well. I was hoping you would because I trust your feedback and understanding. You are spot on. I am happy it came through as erotic but tasteful. That is what I wanted to convey. My love story is far deeper than flesh and lust.

    Thank you for the humorous feedback... you are funny. (*=*) lol

    It's not about vampires so I'll have to think about a different ending. It's about reincarnation and loving someone so deeply you can find your lover life after life. Any suggestions? It is a little akward.

    Con Cariņo, amigo mio,

    MariVal
    "I have crossed oceans of time to find you."
    ― Bram Stoker
Comment from Ulla
Excellent
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Marival, this was a delight to read and I know exactly what you were saying in this sensual tale of yours. I absolutely loved it.
Un abrazo mi amiga. Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
    I should have written this story for a normal story with sexual warning, with the erotic type and notice Not many are reading it.

    Thank you for reading and reviewing it.

    Besitos y abrazos

    Marival
Comment from GWHARGIS
Excellent
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Well, now, Missy, you have quite a story here. The definite passion of a romance bit you took it further. From flesh to heart to eternity. This was very well written. Perhaps a romance novel in the starting. I most definitely enjoyed this. Gretchen

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Thank you, Gretchen, coming from a great author as yourself, it means a lot to me. Have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Excellent
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Another fine tale, Gypsy....and I use the Fantazoid Lovemaking Technique. Not as well known as tantric, it's a style--hell, it doesn't exist, same as my love life

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    LoL

    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Excellent
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If you take the sex out of the story, does the plot fall apart? Then it's erotic romance. The characters' sexual journey tie into the emotional journey. You filled both here. You have romance and your erotic romance. I saw no fault with this contest entry. You did it very tastefully. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Thank you, coming from you, the queen of romance, it means a lot. Thank you!

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
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nice romantically erotic story with much loving emotion

maybe have the pov from a third person observer?
with the characters: cillian (cool name btw) and ... hmm... cecelia?
eh just a thought to kick around lol

good story with good flow
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from FurryBunny
Excellent
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The story is beautifully written, with poetic language that evokes vivid imagery and strong emotions. The author has a unique way of describing the intense connection between the two characters, using metaphor and symbolism to convey the depth of their feelings. The sensory details and introspective musings create a sense of intimacy and passion that draws the reader in. Overall, the writing is captivating and immersive, making for a truly engaging reading experience.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, Furry Bunny. I appreciate your detailed feedback.

    Thank you for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Douglas Goff
Excellent
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Okay. How does one go about reviewing such a sexy, hot, and erotic piece of writing? What exactly does one say without blushing.

Not so easy to pen in these situations.

Umm...*gulp*. .. well done?

Ha! Fun read, my friend. Keep up the entertaining reads!
Douglas

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from RJ Heritage
Excellent
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It reads like a romance novel, but its flavor is a bit more sensual. It would be interesting to see the story if it were expanded into a novel. I actually had a friend name Cillian, but was a girl.
Thanks for sharing.
RJ

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Excellent
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Ok, Debi, BREATHE, Swallow, exhale, and wipe the drool that is still coming out of the corners of your mouth! Whew! You, Marival, when reading you, it can be a bit of a hazard. LOL,

Wow. I always get wrapped up like a 20 year old young woman reading a Danielle Steele book again and I thought those were racy at that time. Even as a young wife, I still didn't know much about the world of erotica. And this is truly amazing!

Not that I have had that much experience in reading it to that extent, but I do get carried away and love a wonderful love story like this. Even more I love the way you explain every little detail of what is happening. It is remarkable and you have such a way with words. Nobody does it like you do! Nobody!! I love it.

Thank you for this steamy erotica step by step into ecstasy! It was brilliant! You are Genius! Virtual 16, my friend.
Love, Debi

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Wow, what a beautiful review! Thank you very much, Debi. I was afraid it wouldn't be erotic enough for the contest. I'm happy you like it and found it steamy. LoL

    Love,

    Marival