New Beginnings
A matter of looking forward, not back30 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You're correct, once we're hurt, it's hard to look forward, but how we start over. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
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You're correct, once we're hurt, it's hard to look forward, but how we start over. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I understand your notes, Yvette, but the second line of this two-line poem doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me. Life's token divining is a strange way to present a look at the future instead of the past.
Jesse
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I understand your notes, Yvette, but the second line of this two-line poem doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me. Life's token divining is a strange way to present a look at the future instead of the past.
Jesse
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
Comment from Dawn Munro
Okay, you win (and I am entered in this contest too -- lol)! But that's how much I think of this little gem. Lovely to have your poetry to read again, my friend. Good luck in the contest!
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Okay, you win (and I am entered in this contest too -- lol)! But that's how much I think of this little gem. Lovely to have your poetry to read again, my friend. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from Janet Foor
You are so right. He always sends a lifeline and it is a matter of looking forward and not back. That's a problem I have but He keeps sending that lifeline. Maybe one day, I'll get it. (Smile)
Blessings
Janet
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You are so right. He always sends a lifeline and it is a matter of looking forward and not back. That's a problem I have but He keeps sending that lifeline. Maybe one day, I'll get it. (Smile)
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from jessizero
I liked this essence poem. You got the internal and ending rhymes right, and your poem was inspiring. I also liked your author's notes about continuing to look forward. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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I liked this essence poem. You got the internal and ending rhymes right, and your poem was inspiring. I also liked your author's notes about continuing to look forward. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from GoWiSt
Nice complementary picture art choice., with that warm, calming, serene scene.
Successfully met the line, syllable count, and intra and end-line rhyme requirements for this 2-line essence poem.
Yes, indeed, sometimes it takes a while for us to see the light / realize the positives from life that has been hard on us. Very good message.
Good luck in the contest!
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Nice complementary picture art choice., with that warm, calming, serene scene.
Successfully met the line, syllable count, and intra and end-line rhyme requirements for this 2-line essence poem.
Yes, indeed, sometimes it takes a while for us to see the light / realize the positives from life that has been hard on us. Very good message.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Lovely picture. You can also get free ones from Google, Bind, and Pinterest is a biggie. Just mention them in your author notes, and they are free. Spoiler alert! I can get lost for an hour just watching baby videos. Be careful! haha Karen
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Lovely picture. You can also get free ones from Google, Bind, and Pinterest is a biggie. Just mention them in your author notes, and they are free. Spoiler alert! I can get lost for an hour just watching baby videos. Be careful! haha Karen
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from poetwatch
That there tree reminds me of me, Yvette. :) I ache each day, the pain don't go away. Still, I have Faith and I'm trying to walk with the armor of God. Many times I stumble, but God gives me a hand. When I read, I smile about my pains being many for love and my friends are more. Thank you for sharing.
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That there tree reminds me of me, Yvette. :) I ache each day, the pain don't go away. Still, I have Faith and I'm trying to walk with the armor of God. Many times I stumble, but God gives me a hand. When I read, I smile about my pains being many for love and my friends are more. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from Mark Jackson
A good entry to the two-line poetry contest, you meet all the requirements. Personally I feel it would be improved by adding a comma between broken and now as you should separate independent clauses. Good luck in the contest. 5 stars.
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A good entry to the two-line poetry contest, you meet all the requirements. Personally I feel it would be improved by adding a comma between broken and now as you should separate independent clauses. Good luck in the contest. 5 stars.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You say a lot with a few words.
-I think that through the bad times
we experience, eventually we move on
to better times, and I agree that
you just have to have faith to get there.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You say a lot with a few words.
-I think that through the bad times
we experience, eventually we move on
to better times, and I agree that
you just have to have faith to get there.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
