Shattered Dream
naani contest16 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Val, your poem is profound, and it gets to the heart of addiction.
Of special note:
sold for drugs
Addiction shatters another dream
(So true, and some things cannot be replaced.)
Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Xo. M
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
  |
Hi Val, your poem is profound, and it gets to the heart of addiction.
Of special note:
sold for drugs
Addiction shatters another dream
(So true, and some things cannot be replaced.)
Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Xo. M
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
-
Thank you for the great review
Comment from nancyjam
Your Naani poem tells a very sad story. Excellent word choice to reveal
the tragedy. I see that you won the contest and it is well deserved.
Congratulations.
Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
|
Your Naani poem tells a very sad story. Excellent word choice to reveal
the tragedy. I see that you won the contest and it is well deserved.
Congratulations.
Nancy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
-
Thank you so much for this lovely review
Comment from jessizero
This poem started out lovely, but it became harsh and tragic. It was upsetting, so congratulations on getting such a reaction. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
|
This poem started out lovely, but it became harsh and tragic. It was upsetting, so congratulations on getting such a reaction. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
-
Some things in life are "harsh and tragic"- thank you for the review
-
I didn?t mean it as a bad thing. I hope you know that
-
No worries
Comment from royowen
Addiction robs the soul of boundaries, morals and conscience, how do I know? An alcoholic who compulsively gambled even with a young family, I met God, He told me to stop, replacing compulsion with Himself, a place for family, my girls and my wife, knew what change can do. Beautifully written, all people need God, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
|
Addiction robs the soul of boundaries, morals and conscience, how do I know? An alcoholic who compulsively gambled even with a young family, I met God, He told me to stop, replacing compulsion with Himself, a place for family, my girls and my wife, knew what change can do. Beautifully written, all people need God, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
-
Thank you for this amazing revision. Addiction is in all families. This why I wrote this, but many choose to ignore the signs
-
Bless you
Comment from RodG
A sad commentary on our culture today which has become saturated with drugs. A family's heirloom is sold because someone is addicted. A lot of narrative crammed into 24 syllables. This Naani deserved to win. Congrats! Rod
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
|
A sad commentary on our culture today which has become saturated with drugs. A family's heirloom is sold because someone is addicted. A lot of narrative crammed into 24 syllables. This Naani deserved to win. Congrats! Rod
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
-
Thank you so much for this insightful review
Comment from jaded831
Your poem hits home. To many of my friends have suffered from this problem. Their children rob them for drugs, and they are left broken with a double. First about the drug inflicted child, then from what was stolen.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
|
Your poem hits home. To many of my friends have suffered from this problem. Their children rob them for drugs, and they are left broken with a double. First about the drug inflicted child, then from what was stolen.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
-
Agree, it's a really heart breaking, and is more common than people want to think about. Thank you for your insightful review
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
The sweetest presentation and yet sending out a strong message that dreams can be instantly destroyed through drugs. The power of your verse is in the contrast between the first two lines and the last two. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
|
The sweetest presentation and yet sending out a strong message that dreams can be instantly destroyed through drugs. The power of your verse is in the contrast between the first two lines and the last two. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
-
Thank you for "getting " my message. I really appreciate this well thought review
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well communicated vision and is a beautiful contrast to the chosen artwork... So many dreams left undreamed as well, yeah? Great entry and good luck in the contest!! ;)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
|
Well communicated vision and is a beautiful contrast to the chosen artwork... So many dreams left undreamed as well, yeah? Great entry and good luck in the contest!! ;)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
-
Thank you so much for your excellent review
Comment from Tom Horonzy
much deeper content than the other entries read so far, but i can see that happening. Anything for a penny to spend for a toke, a brick or a snort, which beltttles the value of the pearl's work.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
|
much deeper content than the other entries read so far, but i can see that happening. Anything for a penny to spend for a toke, a brick or a snort, which beltttles the value of the pearl's work.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
-
Exactly, nothing matters but that next fix. You have dealt with an addict in your life
-
No addicts that I know of in my life, past or present and hopefully the future.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a poignant and realistic Naani about today's society and this is the poignancy of poetry that packs a real punch and you won my vote here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
|
This is a poignant and realistic Naani about today's society and this is the poignancy of poetry that packs a real punch and you won my vote here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
-
This means a great deal coming from you! I appreciate your vote.
