Starting Over
It's about moving, and the changes it causes.2 total reviews
Comment from Julie Helms
As an army brat, boy do I understand this. I had to change schools constantly, find new friends, learn new mini-cultures.
It's a great topic for the contest.
You have a syllable problem in two lines.
Lines 2 and 4 of the first stanza should have 4 syllables. Yours have 5 and 3 respectively.
Best of luck!
Julie
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As an army brat, boy do I understand this. I had to change schools constantly, find new friends, learn new mini-cultures.
It's a great topic for the contest.
You have a syllable problem in two lines.
Lines 2 and 4 of the first stanza should have 4 syllables. Yours have 5 and 3 respectively.
Best of luck!
Julie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Minute Poetry Contest. A well-written poem about how it feels to start over in areas of your life. The final stanza adding hope to the equation and faith in your ability to do it. Nice job.
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An excellent entry for the Minute Poetry Contest. A well-written poem about how it feels to start over in areas of your life. The final stanza adding hope to the equation and faith in your ability to do it. Nice job.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
