Frustration at the Dancehall
Another unwilling dance partner has her silent say3 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Not sure I'd want to dance with them after that exchange... lol! Would say that while the rhyme seems to work with your rhythm, I'm not sure it conveys the emotions you are seeking here....? Good luck in the contest! :-)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Not sure I'd want to dance with them after that exchange... lol! Would say that while the rhyme seems to work with your rhythm, I'm not sure it conveys the emotions you are seeking here....? Good luck in the contest! :-)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Cheers.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Often dancing breaks the ice when it comes to meeting new friends and your poem made me smile. Overcoming shyness is a trial for some, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Often dancing breaks the ice when it comes to meeting new friends and your poem made me smile. Overcoming shyness is a trial for some, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Dolly.
Comment from Val Crisson
Nice poem here, but naani don't rhyme. You'll probably get away with it, but is the committee is really on task it shouldn't qualify. It' lovely though and very full of hope
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Nice poem here, but naani don't rhyme. You'll probably get away with it, but is the committee is really on task it shouldn't qualify. It' lovely though and very full of hope
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Val. Actually, two of the three examples given do rhyme, one of them where all four lines end in the same rhyming sound. Cheers, anyway.
