Silence Please!
In hindsight this was my biggest fear3 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your 200th milestone post!!! I enjoyed reading this contest entry and wish you luck with the contest.
My dear Dad often said that I was the perfect (because of "My' dad needs a lower case 'd')
A voice that sounded very much like my own, said.
"Excuse me, I asked for fifties and twenties; you have given me fifties." (said, & move the dialogue closer.)
Each person's dialogue get their own paragraph.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
Congratulations on your 200th milestone post!!! I enjoyed reading this contest entry and wish you luck with the contest.
My dear Dad often said that I was the perfect (because of "My' dad needs a lower case 'd')
A voice that sounded very much like my own, said.
"Excuse me, I asked for fifties and twenties; you have given me fifties." (said, & move the dialogue closer.)
Each person's dialogue get their own paragraph.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the helpful review; your suggestions are noted, and dealt with, Barbara. I appreciate your assistance and encouragement.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Note: Being a baby boomer not sure about your past as a young person
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Anywho, it also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Note: Being a baby boomer not sure about your past as a young person
...
Anywho, it also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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I was born in 1960 to strict but loving Scottish parents; now married to an Aussie, having lived in Australia since 1967. Thank you for your review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I very much liked reading this non-fiction piece about a greatest fear. It is probably on my list of the four biggest ones, too, to have to talk to strangers, even if they were most likely in a good mood already. I thought you did a nice job explaining past and recently past examples of what was done to face this fear.
The only suggestion I have is here:
"She's such a good little girl isn't she."
I would add a comma after girl and a question mark after she at the end.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
I very much liked reading this non-fiction piece about a greatest fear. It is probably on my list of the four biggest ones, too, to have to talk to strangers, even if they were most likely in a good mood already. I thought you did a nice job explaining past and recently past examples of what was done to face this fear.
The only suggestion I have is here:
"She's such a good little girl isn't she."
I would add a comma after girl and a question mark after she at the end.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your review and sugestions