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Silence Please!

In hindsight this was my biggest fear

3 total reviews 
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Congratulations on your 200th milestone post!!! I enjoyed reading this contest entry and wish you luck with the contest.
 
My dear Dad often said that I was the perfect (because of "My' dad needs a lower case 'd')

A voice that sounded very much like my own, said.
"Excuse me, I asked for fifties and twenties; you have given me fifties." (said, & move the dialogue closer.)

Each person's dialogue get their own paragraph.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
    Thank you for the helpful review; your suggestions are noted, and dealt with, Barbara. I appreciate your assistance and encouragement.
Comment from Ricky1024
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Note: Being a baby boomer not sure about your past as a young person
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Anywho, it also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
    I was born in 1960 to strict but loving Scottish parents; now married to an Aussie, having lived in Australia since 1967. Thank you for your review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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I very much liked reading this non-fiction piece about a greatest fear. It is probably on my list of the four biggest ones, too, to have to talk to strangers, even if they were most likely in a good mood already. I thought you did a nice job explaining past and recently past examples of what was done to face this fear.
The only suggestion I have is here:
"She's such a good little girl isn't she."
I would add a comma after girl and a question mark after she at the end.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
    Thank you for your review and sugestions