Like I Used To
free verse9 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Deb,
I know exactly how you feel about poems that want to be born. Right now, they are just thoughts, phrases, incomplete, stuck. I'm there, too. I haven't been able to sit down very long in this computer chair because of the pain in my right hip and ankle. (I've probably mentioned about my slip in 8 inches of mud back on March 3rd.) Still aching. And now, writer's block is settling in. I've even succumbed to reviving poems from 2010, the year I joined Fanstory. Three so far.
Anyway, I enjoyed your free verse poem, describing your feelings, a poet in limbo.
I like the personification in these lines,
"A poem lurks nearby
I feel it vibrating
see it glowing
hear it murmuring"
and,
"The poem mutters under its breath
taunting me"
And these are the taunts...
"get a bloody grip
grab on tight" ... You make it sound like the poem wants to be released, that it already exists and needs to be born. I like that. I never plan a poem. I let it come out, line by line, rhyme by rhyme.
Nicely penned! Save this one for your first book.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hi Deb,
I know exactly how you feel about poems that want to be born. Right now, they are just thoughts, phrases, incomplete, stuck. I'm there, too. I haven't been able to sit down very long in this computer chair because of the pain in my right hip and ankle. (I've probably mentioned about my slip in 8 inches of mud back on March 3rd.) Still aching. And now, writer's block is settling in. I've even succumbed to reviving poems from 2010, the year I joined Fanstory. Three so far.
Anyway, I enjoyed your free verse poem, describing your feelings, a poet in limbo.
I like the personification in these lines,
"A poem lurks nearby
I feel it vibrating
see it glowing
hear it murmuring"
and,
"The poem mutters under its breath
taunting me"
And these are the taunts...
"get a bloody grip
grab on tight" ... You make it sound like the poem wants to be released, that it already exists and needs to be born. I like that. I never plan a poem. I let it come out, line by line, rhyme by rhyme.
Nicely penned! Save this one for your first book.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hi Kimbob :)
Thank you so much for your kind feedback and generous star award.
I'm sorry to hear about your fall, I didn't know... I hope that you continue to recover well and are soon ache-free.
Sending my best to you and hope too that you are soon released from your poetic limbo.
Love, Debra x
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is such a great free verse and a very creative look at writer's block. Confronting it, conversing with it, ad committing to picking up that pen. Exceptional.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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This is such a great free verse and a very creative look at writer's block. Confronting it, conversing with it, ad committing to picking up that pen. Exceptional.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Hello Ginda,
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and generous star award. I truly appreciate it :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
I know what you mean. There are certain circumstances required to write poetry and if the brain is too stressed, it's hard to let those words flow. I really liked the opening personification of the poem that is under the surface of being written. It's there and alive and you can do it!!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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I know what you mean. There are certain circumstances required to write poetry and if the brain is too stressed, it's hard to let those words flow. I really liked the opening personification of the poem that is under the surface of being written. It's there and alive and you can do it!!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Hi Helen,
Thank you so much for your feedback. I hope to get back to normal soon and be able to write freely. At the moment I feel like I'm being driven by the things that are going on in my life - each attempt at writing, I either end up with something that wasn't intended (melancholy) or nothing at all.
Thank you for your positivity - it is gratefully received!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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💖💖These times don't last. New seasons always keep coming.
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Comment from nancyjam
I can certainly relate to your poem. I just can't seem to get my muse
back. I've been trying for months to get back to writing and just recently returned to Fanstory hoping to write poems again. I will bookmark your poem and read it over again. It will help knowing someone else struggles and is not giving up. Thanks for sharing your beautiful free verse.
You can do it! And you did with this one.
Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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I can certainly relate to your poem. I just can't seem to get my muse
back. I've been trying for months to get back to writing and just recently returned to Fanstory hoping to write poems again. I will bookmark your poem and read it over again. It will help knowing someone else struggles and is not giving up. Thanks for sharing your beautiful free verse.
You can do it! And you did with this one.
Nancy
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Ah, thank you so much, Nancy :)
Wishing you all the best with your muse - the struggle is real, right?!
Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I know this feeling of being stuck and it's infuriating! The best time to stir up the muse is first thing in the morning but that's no guarantee. I like the personification of your poem and its elusiveness. And the whole post has an instant appeal as usual with your work. It won't be long now:)) Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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I know this feeling of being stuck and it's infuriating! The best time to stir up the muse is first thing in the morning but that's no guarantee. I like the personification of your poem and its elusiveness. And the whole post has an instant appeal as usual with your work. It won't be long now:)) Love Debbie x
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Hi Debbie :)
Thank you so much for your kind feedback, I hope to get back into the swing of things soon!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from jessizero
This reads like giving birth to a poem, which is impressive. I especially liked the way you formatted the last five words. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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This reads like giving birth to a poem, which is impressive. I especially liked the way you formatted the last five words. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Jessi, for your kind feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A very good description of writer's block, when the words and the poem are just beneath the surface of your brain and you are struggling to get ahold of them. Nicely written free verse. One easy fix: Murmuring (check spelling) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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A very good description of writer's block, when the words and the poem are just beneath the surface of your brain and you are struggling to get ahold of them. Nicely written free verse. One easy fix: Murmuring (check spelling) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Hi Marilyn :) Thank you for your kind feedback and for picking up on my spelling mistake - much appreciated! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Is this your muse trying to break free and release these words so that you can commit them to paper Debra. I enjoyed the action in this post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Is this your muse trying to break free and release these words so that you can commit them to paper Debra. I enjoyed the action in this post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Something like that, I think, Dolly!
Life is a roller coaster at the moment and I'm so overwhelmed and emotional about one thing or another, that I'm finding it difficult to write anything of any substance.
Thank you for bearing with me and for your feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from patcelaw
Sometimes it seems like that we have a muse that has run amok when it gives the words for a poem in the middle of the night. I have many times when this happens to me. I enjoyed your poems very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia .
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Sometimes it seems like that we have a muse that has run amok when it gives the words for a poem in the middle of the night. I have many times when this happens to me. I enjoyed your poems very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia .
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your feedback, Patricia :)
Best wishes, Debra
