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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Ode to the Baby Bottle"A NaPoWriMo Book of Poetry
9 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and you have a very valid point. I nursed all of my babies, and am a believer in that, but I can see a good argument for bottles. Your rhyming scheme is very good. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and you have a very valid point. I nursed all of my babies, and am a believer in that, but I can see a good argument for bottles. Your rhyming scheme is very good. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Kim
Comment from Gloria ....
Very nicely done, Kim. Tis so true that a bottle gives a mother a much needed few moments away from breast feeding.
Your rhymes and metre are spot on, and it is a poem new parents will all relate to.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Very nicely done, Kim. Tis so true that a bottle gives a mother a much needed few moments away from breast feeding.
Your rhymes and metre are spot on, and it is a poem new parents will all relate to.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Gloria. We are truly enjoying Evelyn Grace, even at 3am! lol
Kim
Comment from Sallyo
An unusual subject here and it's an apt entry for the rhyming poetry comp. I've never used a baby bottle (MUCH too idle to go through all the sterilising) but I can imagine the baby revving up for the treat.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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An unusual subject here and it's an apt entry for the rhyming poetry comp. I've never used a baby bottle (MUCH too idle to go through all the sterilising) but I can imagine the baby revving up for the treat.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Sally!
Comment from RodG
A delightful rhyming poem written from the baby's point of view. Indeed, a bottle brings delight as soon as she sees it.
What would she or her parents do without it? Rod
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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A delightful rhyming poem written from the baby's point of view. Indeed, a bottle brings delight as soon as she sees it.
What would she or her parents do without it? Rod
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Rod!
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, those were some very tiring nights. So glad that you could help with feeding to give your daughter and son-in-law a rest. Yes, hooray for bottles! But my youngest absolutely refused to take the bottle. I nursed her for a year.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Oh, those were some very tiring nights. So glad that you could help with feeding to give your daughter and son-in-law a rest. Yes, hooray for bottles! But my youngest absolutely refused to take the bottle. I nursed her for a year.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Hi Helen!
Nichole has been working hard on breast feeding. Bottles come in between lol thanks for a great review.
Kim
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It's good if she can but she shouldn't feel forced like the women of my generation. The hospital LaLeche League "nazi" made it seem like I would be a failure as a woman if I didn't!
Comment from Mark Jackson
That is a nice little piece of writing it is very cute. It does have a couple of issues with the rhyming scheme however. Bonafide rhymes with day and not provide. I know it looks like it should rhyme. Say doesn't rhyme with babes. I love the line: Our sweet newborn pride.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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That is a nice little piece of writing it is very cute. It does have a couple of issues with the rhyming scheme however. Bonafide rhymes with day and not provide. I know it looks like it should rhyme. Say doesn't rhyme with babes. I love the line: Our sweet newborn pride.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Hi Mark!
Thank you for reading and reviewing in such detail. I checked, based on your comment, and decided to go with spelling as bona fides, but multiple sources (dictionaries) have pronunciations you may listen to and it is a perfect rhyme. Babes, of course, is a near rhyme, but I didn't think it distracted from the poem, as is. Thank you so much.
Kim
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I pleased you got it sorted::)
Comment from mermaids
I just love your words. Nothing sweeter than a happy baby. Your poem captures the joy of a satisfied baby. You have a strong steady beat and a smooth flow of rhyming words.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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I just love your words. Nothing sweeter than a happy baby. Your poem captures the joy of a satisfied baby. You have a strong steady beat and a smooth flow of rhyming words.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Mia Twysted
Oh, how cute. Babies are just so adorable. Your poem was calming and peaceful. Like a story you would read to lull a child into sleep without them knowing it.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Oh, how cute. Babies are just so adorable. Your poem was calming and peaceful. Like a story you would read to lull a child into sleep without them knowing it.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from jessizero
I loved your ode to a baby's bottle. For my nieces and nephew, it was the binky. I admire your rhymes, as well as the rest of the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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I loved your ode to a baby's bottle. For my nieces and nephew, it was the binky. I admire your rhymes, as well as the rest of the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Jessi!