Colorful
100 word fiction16 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good story about a young lady deciding on her own fate. Why would she want to marry an old man when a young one was offered? It might be a matter of money, which could come back to bite her later if young man needs a well-to-do bride.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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This is a good story about a young lady deciding on her own fate. Why would she want to marry an old man when a young one was offered? It might be a matter of money, which could come back to bite her later if young man needs a well-to-do bride.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I suppose the reader's answer to her question would be the yellow rose since he isn't as old as her suitor with the red rose. But who is to know who is the best one for her or any of us when it comes to age, my answer would be to keep looking and don't settle for someone because they have a particular color of rose.
Jesse
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I suppose the reader's answer to her question would be the yellow rose since he isn't as old as her suitor with the red rose. But who is to know who is the best one for her or any of us when it comes to age, my answer would be to keep looking and don't settle for someone because they have a particular color of rose.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Some interesting dilemmas for the young lady, raised here. Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
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I hope that is okay with you.
I enjoyed reading your post.
Jesse
Comment from Pam (respa)
Very nice artwork, zanya. I like your profile pic, too. You wrote a good story with a good topic. I like the time period you chose with Lady Amanda wearing her bonnet and waiting for a prospective husband who is quite a bit older than she is. I like your description of her being indignant. Good for her!!
She has a mind of her own, and was taken not only by the yellow roses, but the man who was holding them. You do a good job of leaving the story open ended so we will have to decide whether she got on the train or not. I like the question at the end, and maybe she was thinking of those yellow roses and golden locks.
Very well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Very nice artwork, zanya. I like your profile pic, too. You wrote a good story with a good topic. I like the time period you chose with Lady Amanda wearing her bonnet and waiting for a prospective husband who is quite a bit older than she is. I like your description of her being indignant. Good for her!!
She has a mind of her own, and was taken not only by the yellow roses, but the man who was holding them. You do a good job of leaving the story open ended so we will have to decide whether she got on the train or not. I like the question at the end, and maybe she was thinking of those yellow roses and golden locks.
Very well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Superb review zanya
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You are welcome, zanya, and I appreciate your reply.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Ahhh, the color of love sounds to be yellow! If the red rose carrier won't do it, go for the yellow and the gorgeous bearer of the rose.
Well written and engaging.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Ahhh, the color of love sounds to be yellow! If the red rose carrier won't do it, go for the yellow and the gorgeous bearer of the rose.
Well written and engaging.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from Wendy G
So there was no man at the station with graying temples and carrying a red rose? And apparently no female that this young man with golden locks was seeking? Then perhaps these two were meant to find each other. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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So there was no man at the station with graying temples and carrying a red rose? And apparently no female that this young man with golden locks was seeking? Then perhaps these two were meant to find each other. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Yes indeed - Cupid's arrow takes unusual turns! zanya
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Zanya, your story has good sensory appeal, and I could see the entire train scene. I like the twist at the end of the story. I almost thought that Amanda's was going to kiss the man who was carrying the yellow rose.
Embarrassing moments happen. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Hi Zanya, your story has good sensory appeal, and I could see the entire train scene. I like the twist at the end of the story. I almost thought that Amanda's was going to kiss the man who was carrying the yellow rose.
Embarrassing moments happen. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Great review - really enjoyed reading it with all the romantic possibilities! zanya
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Does make one wonder, doesn't it? I enjoyed reading this contest entry. You have all the required elements, character, problem, and solution. Good luck with contest.
'At twenty-one I am too young for greying temples,' she thought. (thought is often in italics and wondering too))
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Does make one wonder, doesn't it? I enjoyed reading this contest entry. You have all the required elements, character, problem, and solution. Good luck with contest.
'At twenty-one I am too young for greying temples,' she thought. (thought is often in italics and wondering too))
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have good use of onomatapoetic words. This leads to a good question: " She caught sight of a man carrying a yellow rose. No greying temples. Just golden locks and a determined gait." What is the color of love ?' she wondered." At her rate she's never going to find anybody.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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You have good use of onomatapoetic words. This leads to a good question: " She caught sight of a man carrying a yellow rose. No greying temples. Just golden locks and a determined gait." What is the color of love ?' she wondered." At her rate she's never going to find anybody.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Just love how reviewers engaged with this young lady's love dilemma- thanks for sharing and reviewing zanya
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A very good topic
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Zanya, this is very well written and presented very colorfully. I think the answer to your question could be greying temples. That's the problem; there is no one answer and that's also the fun of love. I enjoy reading you a 100-word story.
Best wishes
Alex
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Zanya, this is very well written and presented very colorfully. I think the answer to your question could be greying temples. That's the problem; there is no one answer and that's also the fun of love. I enjoy reading you a 100-word story.
Best wishes
Alex
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from LJbutterfly
You have crafted an interesting story set in an era of the past. It sounds like Amanda wasn't interested in gray temples and a red rose. Her preference was someone else's suitor. She looked around and saw the platform almost empty, meaning no other young lady was present, so the yellow rose man could think he was to meet her. Love is the color of the two people who find each other. Interesting. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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You have crafted an interesting story set in an era of the past. It sounds like Amanda wasn't interested in gray temples and a red rose. Her preference was someone else's suitor. She looked around and saw the platform almost empty, meaning no other young lady was present, so the yellow rose man could think he was to meet her. Love is the color of the two people who find each other. Interesting. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Great review with all those possible outcomes! zanya
