Crime and Punishent
100 words11 total reviews
Comment from Mark Jackson
I like it, 100 words is so difficult to write and yet enjoyable to read. I think you reminded me of Terry Pratchett a little, he has the Hogfather and the Tooth fairy. Good luck in the competition.
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I like it, 100 words is so difficult to write and yet enjoyable to read. I think you reminded me of Terry Pratchett a little, he has the Hogfather and the Tooth fairy. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
Comment from SimianSavant
Nice one. FYI, you're missing a quote symbol here: "Enough!" Father Time Interrupted. ^^^ From now on Santa
Thanks for the read and good luck in the contest,
SS
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Nice one. FYI, you're missing a quote symbol here: "Enough!" Father Time Interrupted. ^^^ From now on Santa
Thanks for the read and good luck in the contest,
SS
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Phew! You wouldn't mess with Father Time would you? This is an original and fun 100 word flash revealing the fact that, sometimes, we can't afford to be complacent in life and simply have to be disciplined and rotated. Small edit: your title: Crime and Punish(m)ent. Well done and good luck with this excellent entry! Debbie
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Phew! You wouldn't mess with Father Time would you? This is an original and fun 100 word flash revealing the fact that, sometimes, we can't afford to be complacent in life and simply have to be disciplined and rotated. Small edit: your title: Crime and Punish(m)ent. Well done and good luck with this excellent entry! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
Comment from Wendy G
A clever and imaginative story, which would doubtless appeal to all children, but has a message for adults as well. Very creative. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
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A clever and imaginative story, which would doubtless appeal to all children, but has a message for adults as well. Very creative. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a stern warning from the grim reaper to scare all the children and wonder if this would have been posted at Halloween as a trick or treat invention, a fun read, love Dolly x x x
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This sounds like a stern warning from the grim reaper to scare all the children and wonder if this would have been posted at Halloween as a trick or treat invention, a fun read, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
Comment from Pam (respa)
Nice artwork and story to go with it. I like your topic and the idea of these characters trying to convince the others that they are the best. Each one has a valid argument, but Father Time steps in to settle the issue, and I like how he does it. I don't think these characters will have the argument again. A great idea and good entry. Good luck in the contest.
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Nice artwork and story to go with it. I like your topic and the idea of these characters trying to convince the others that they are the best. Each one has a valid argument, but Father Time steps in to settle the issue, and I like how he does it. I don't think these characters will have the argument again. A great idea and good entry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
Comment from kahpot
Now would not that be something, what a wonderful and very humorous read, if I had to say one thing, it would be about the title it is a bit confusing (to me) the ending of your story suggests punishment, but I can't see the crimes, (help me) very well presented, best wishes for your contest
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Now would not that be something, what a wonderful and very humorous read, if I had to say one thing, it would be about the title it is a bit confusing (to me) the ending of your story suggests punishment, but I can't see the crimes, (help me) very well presented, best wishes for your contest
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your review. I don't really like the title either but couldn't come up with a decent one. I picked C & P because of the punishment of swapping roles. If you have suggestions for a better title I'd appreciate it.
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I think you just said it yourself in
swapping roles, so something like
role reversals
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent imaginative flash story for the contest.
I'd like to see the bunny get into the house and under the pillow,
And Santa laying or depositing eggs, the fairy carrying all those presents.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
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This is an excellent imaginative flash story for the contest.
I'd like to see the bunny get into the house and under the pillow,
And Santa laying or depositing eggs, the fairy carrying all those presents.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
This is very humorous. It is like battle of the kiddie superpowers. Putting father time in charge of them is very clever. Great timely story, briefly and effectively told for the challenge! Julie
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This is very humorous. It is like battle of the kiddie superpowers. Putting father time in charge of them is very clever. Great timely story, briefly and effectively told for the challenge! Julie
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Haha. For me, it would still boil down to whoever brought candy would win my heart. I'm THAT level of shallow.
Cute premise (of course FATHER Time would be the arbiter of justice!). I hope it does well for you in the contest! xo
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Haha. For me, it would still boil down to whoever brought candy would win my heart. I'm THAT level of shallow.
Cute premise (of course FATHER Time would be the arbiter of justice!). I hope it does well for you in the contest! xo
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
