Panpipes
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Comment from estory
Lots of TV style action in this segment, I liked how you orchestrated that scene in the hotel with the elevators passing each other. Ayesha barely escapes, Steve has a moment with the police, and there's some nice humorous dialogue banter there that serves as a bit of comic relief to the tense action. estory
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Lots of TV style action in this segment, I liked how you orchestrated that scene in the hotel with the elevators passing each other. Ayesha barely escapes, Steve has a moment with the police, and there's some nice humorous dialogue banter there that serves as a bit of comic relief to the tense action. estory
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thanks, estory. I appreciate your comments. Sorry about the late reply. I've been battling COVID for the past week. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Ulla
This is such a great continuation to the story, Tony. You really do know how to spin a great tale. Now, she and Steve are both safe, and on their way to the hotel. But Steve hesitates to get a room next to hers, afraid it will be taken the wrong way. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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This is such a great continuation to the story, Tony. You really do know how to spin a great tale. Now, she and Steve are both safe, and on their way to the hotel. But Steve hesitates to get a room next to hers, afraid it will be taken the wrong way. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Ulla. I appreciate your comments and the generous award of a sixth star. Sorry about the late response. I've been battling COVID for the past week. All good wishes, Tony
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Not to worry. I just hope you feel better by now:)))
Comment from Jacob1395
The action and tension really moves along well in this chapter, Tony. I was glad that the man at the hotel told Ayesha the man was following here, giving her a chance to flee. It definitely does make me wonder what's going to happen to her next and if the man is going to catch up with her. An excellent piece.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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The action and tension really moves along well in this chapter, Tony. I was glad that the man at the hotel told Ayesha the man was following here, giving her a chance to flee. It definitely does make me wonder what's going to happen to her next and if the man is going to catch up with her. An excellent piece.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Jacob. I appreciate your comments and the generous award of a sixth star. Sorry about the late response. I've been battling COVID for the past week. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
This is an excellent chapter that flows well and fills in with details about Ayesha and Steve. I don't imagine Steve was feeling too good, and on top of that he was having to defend himself and no one was believing him.
At least the doorman at the hotel was concerned about Ayesha, and he didn't even know what had been going on. She was lucky he was on her side and cared about her. It allowed Ayesha time to make her plans to avoid any trouble. I'm sure the doorman didn't know what to do when Ayesha hugged him.
Things go much better at the police station. Interesting that she happened to see the poster about the ring. All of this must have her head spinning. She was even able to get a picture of the poster. Steve is very helpful with the phone, and wanted to stay closer by but figured that wasn't proper. It will be interesting to see who comes into contact with whom next.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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This is an excellent chapter that flows well and fills in with details about Ayesha and Steve. I don't imagine Steve was feeling too good, and on top of that he was having to defend himself and no one was believing him.
At least the doorman at the hotel was concerned about Ayesha, and he didn't even know what had been going on. She was lucky he was on her side and cared about her. It allowed Ayesha time to make her plans to avoid any trouble. I'm sure the doorman didn't know what to do when Ayesha hugged him.
Things go much better at the police station. Interesting that she happened to see the poster about the ring. All of this must have her head spinning. She was even able to get a picture of the poster. Steve is very helpful with the phone, and wanted to stay closer by but figured that wasn't proper. It will be interesting to see who comes into contact with whom next.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Pam. I appreciate your comments and the generous award of a sixth star. Sorry about the late response. I've been battling COVID for the past week. All good wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving, Tony. I'm sorry you were battling COVID and hope you are well now. No need to apologize about a late reply. On a different note, did you know there is a young man from Perth who made it to the round of 24 on American Idol? He is one of my favorites. A great voice!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This was a really fabulous chapter, Tony. The detail you put into each situation puts us right there with them. I loved the lift episode, thank goodness the doorman mentioned it to Ayesha. The police constables were rather rude until they discovered Steve was telling the truth, then backed up by Ayesha running into the station. Now she has spotted Bruno's ring in the poster, this is a really good discovery! Your synopsis is perfect for sending to an agent, that was a brilliant idea. I can't wait to read on! Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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This was a really fabulous chapter, Tony. The detail you put into each situation puts us right there with them. I loved the lift episode, thank goodness the doorman mentioned it to Ayesha. The police constables were rather rude until they discovered Steve was telling the truth, then backed up by Ayesha running into the station. Now she has spotted Bruno's ring in the poster, this is a really good discovery! Your synopsis is perfect for sending to an agent, that was a brilliant idea. I can't wait to read on! Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your lovely comments and the generous award of a sixth star. Sorry about the late response. I've been battling COVID for the past week. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Hey Tony. This is a thrill to read and so easy with the font size big or rather large enough for those of us with vision problems to read and still have enough left to write a review after reading all of this. I enjoyed reading this immensely. The accent is authentic as you speak in a British tongue. This is quality reading! Thanks for the exciting tale of the panpipes.
Jesse
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Hey Tony. This is a thrill to read and so easy with the font size big or rather large enough for those of us with vision problems to read and still have enough left to write a review after reading all of this. I enjoyed reading this immensely. The accent is authentic as you speak in a British tongue. This is quality reading! Thanks for the exciting tale of the panpipes.
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Such an encouraging review, Jesse. Thank you!
Best wishes Tony
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You're welcome, Tony.
Jesse
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Zipping right along. Reminds me a little of "Moon lighting" the TV show. Steve seems as much a duck out of water as Ayesha in this situation. Have a good weekend. Karen
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Zipping right along. Reminds me a little of "Moon lighting" the TV show. Steve seems as much a duck out of water as Ayesha in this situation. Have a good weekend. Karen
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for your kind words, Karen. Wishing you a happy and blessed Easter. All the best, Tony.
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you too. I have my box of Peeps! Karen :-)
Comment from Jim Wile
A good, exciting, and sometimes humorous chapter with those two nebish constables doubting everything Steve told them. I've never heard that expression, "on a hiding to nothing" before, but it was perfect in this case.
I'm just curious as to why the doorman thought Jimmy might have been Ayesha's fiance? He was right to be suspicious that he didn't appear to be so, but what made him think along those lines in the first place?
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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A good, exciting, and sometimes humorous chapter with those two nebish constables doubting everything Steve told them. I've never heard that expression, "on a hiding to nothing" before, but it was perfect in this case.
I'm just curious as to why the doorman thought Jimmy might have been Ayesha's fiance? He was right to be suspicious that he didn't appear to be so, but what made him think along those lines in the first place?
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for your kind words, Jim.
Ayesha had told the doorman that she was meeting her fiancé and running late. (Chapter 21 ?I?m meant to be meeting my fiancé in the rooftop bar. Running a bit late. He?ll kill me.? However, when Jimmy appears, he thinks it unlikely that he's the fiancé, so tests him with a trick question then arranges things so Ayesha has time to elude him.
The phrase a hiding to nothing is an English idiom meaning 'a no-win situation'.
Wishing you a happy and blessed Easter. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Treischel
The banter with the police is hilarious to the reader. Not so, I guess for Steve.
I don't understand the "hiding to nothing" comment.
I liked the part with the crossing elevators, and the Ayesha and the doorman.
Nice drama, followed by relief. Then nice touch on the ring.
Good humor at the end with the knicker comment. Good work.very enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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The banter with the police is hilarious to the reader. Not so, I guess for Steve.
I don't understand the "hiding to nothing" comment.
I liked the part with the crossing elevators, and the Ayesha and the doorman.
Nice drama, followed by relief. Then nice touch on the ring.
Good humor at the end with the knicker comment. Good work.very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Tom. That idiom had a few people fooled. The phrase a hiding to nothing is an English idiom meaning 'a no-win situation'.
All the best, Tony.
Comment from Cindy Warren
They were pretty lucky. He easily could have caught her. I think Johnno and his thugs would be known to police. If they'd known what Johnno and David had already done, they'd have taken it seriously.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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They were pretty lucky. He easily could have caught her. I think Johnno and his thugs would be known to police. If they'd known what Johnno and David had already done, they'd have taken it seriously.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Cindy. I appreciate the review. A happy Easter to you. All good wishes, Tony.
