Revision of a Kiss
Practice makes perfect.6 total reviews
Comment from Mark Jackson
Very good, I like it, a lot. I like the image of an artist and muse crossed with a lovers kiss, it works really well. Good luck in the competition, I think the entries for this one are going to be very strong.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Very good, I like it, a lot. I like the image of an artist and muse crossed with a lovers kiss, it works really well. Good luck in the competition, I think the entries for this one are going to be very strong.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thanks Mark, I found it enjoyable to write and really appreciate the wonderful feedback :-)
Comment from karenina
Very nice lune! Softly sensual and suggestive...
Perfect "brush stroke" image to enhance the meaning of your well chosen words!
Best of luck in the contest, Kelly...
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Very nice lune! Softly sensual and suggestive...
Perfect "brush stroke" image to enhance the meaning of your well chosen words!
Best of luck in the contest, Kelly...
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thank you Karenina :-) It's nice to receive such lovely comments. I'm glad you enjoyed reading. K
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Hi Kelly!
You're fitting in great!
Hope you unpack and plan on settling in here!
Comment from jessizero
I think this was a lovely lune poem. It was sensual but not explicit. I like that it was based on the word "brush." I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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I think this was a lovely lune poem. It was sensual but not explicit. I like that it was based on the word "brush." I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much for the feedback :-) I wondered about how to categorise it and felt it definitely fitted in more with romance than erotica (though it could be interpreted that way too). I appreciate your kind comments. K
Comment from hullabaloo22
This is a really beautiful and quite sensual piece of writing, a perfect example of the saying: 'less is more.' You chose a lovely image to compliment the poem too.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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This is a really beautiful and quite sensual piece of writing, a perfect example of the saying: 'less is more.' You chose a lovely image to compliment the poem too.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Hi there; many thanks for your thoughtful feedback. I found that the image seemed to mesh well with the writing - something I didn't see when I first scrolled through the art work. I'm so glad you saw the beauty in this :-)
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Just like the paintbrush strokes the canvas, caressing its muse, so do one's lips caress their human muse.
A beautiful image to go with your words. Good luck with the Lune contest. I hope people will read this, as it doesn't appear that you've promoted it. But you've entered the contest, and if you place a few more people will take a look at your work.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Just like the paintbrush strokes the canvas, caressing its muse, so do one's lips caress their human muse.
A beautiful image to go with your words. Good luck with the Lune contest. I hope people will read this, as it doesn't appear that you've promoted it. But you've entered the contest, and if you place a few more people will take a look at your work.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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A lovely take on the lune, Pam and one that I was hoping to achieve. I should promote it - it makes more sense to put it out there.
Thank you for your kind words and I too adored the image :-) Kelly x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is an art in kissing and it takes time to perfect and I always loved practicing, I loved your fine words here for the contest and wish you luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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There is an art in kissing and it takes time to perfect and I always loved practicing, I loved your fine words here for the contest and wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the lovely review, Dolly :-) I appreciate it, as it was my first lune and I kept playing around with the title. It means a lot to hear your positive feedback - many thanks x Kelly x
p.s. I tried to follow you, but was unable. Do you know how I might be able to do this??
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Yes, positive feedback and five stars are always appreciated aren't they? Good luck with your poetry.
