Memories
Poem 5/7/55 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
One comment. I think beckon would work better than bestir. It is a bit archaic. Just my opinion. These little ones are tough to do. Good work all around. Nice picture too. Karen
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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One comment. I think beckon would work better than bestir. It is a bit archaic. Just my opinion. These little ones are tough to do. Good work all around. Nice picture too. Karen
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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Thanks for reading and sharing -much appreciated- apology for tardy reply! zanya
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Comment from Topeking
Well done! Very good descriptive imagery used within the poem, very good vibrant colours used and I love the quill like font, it really blends with story within the poem! I will just make a suggestion, check the second line I don't think it is 7 syllables and double checked for you online and it is only 6 syllables altogether.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Well done! Very good descriptive imagery used within the poem, very good vibrant colours used and I love the quill like font, it really blends with story within the poem! I will just make a suggestion, check the second line I don't think it is 7 syllables and double checked for you online and it is only 6 syllables altogether.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from Julie Helms
The presentation of this 5-7-5 is lovely:picture, font, and feelings expressed.
I have a question about your choice of "musky". Do you mean musty?
Definition for musky:
Something related to a substance with a penetrating persistent odor obtained from a sac beneath the abdominal skin of the male musk deer and used as a perfume fixative.
Thanks for sharing,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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The presentation of this 5-7-5 is lovely:picture, font, and feelings expressed.
I have a question about your choice of "musky". Do you mean musty?
Definition for musky:
Something related to a substance with a penetrating persistent odor obtained from a sac beneath the abdominal skin of the male musk deer and used as a perfume fixative.
Thanks for sharing,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks for reading -zanya
Comment from jessizero
You seem to be one syllable short on the second line and one syllable too many on the third line. However, that third line might be because you are counting "memories" as two syllables instead of three. I'd recommend "mem'ries," but I understand that's not a great thing to do. Anyway, thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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You seem to be one syllable short on the second line and one syllable too many on the third line. However, that third line might be because you are counting "memories" as two syllables instead of three. I'd recommend "mem'ries," but I understand that's not a great thing to do. Anyway, thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Pearl Edwards
.This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem as the dried petals pedals fall out as do the memories around them. memories bestir - lovely words to end your presentation on.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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.This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem as the dried petals pedals fall out as do the memories around them. memories bestir - lovely words to end your presentation on.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Great review zanya
