A 130 Turnaround
A feminine take on Shakespeare's 1305 total reviews
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is a very cute first poem! Congrats on joining Fanstory! I haven't tried writing a sonnet yet, but yours is great. Thanks for sharing this Susan!
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This is a very cute first poem! Congrats on joining Fanstory! I haven't tried writing a sonnet yet, but yours is great. Thanks for sharing this Susan!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
Comment from locust
This made my heart smile. It truly is what is underneath that counts. Being loved by a good person is a wonderful thing. Congratulations on your first post!
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This made my heart smile. It truly is what is underneath that counts. Being loved by a good person is a wonderful thing. Congratulations on your first post!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from patcelaw
First I would like to welcome you to fan story. I hope that we hear on fan story will be able to help you with your writing if you need to have help and I pray that you will enjoy the poetry of other authors and the writing of other writers as well. Patricia.
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First I would like to welcome you to fan story. I hope that we hear on fan story will be able to help you with your writing if you need to have help and I pray that you will enjoy the poetry of other authors and the writing of other writers as well. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Shakespeare speaks of his mistress as honest in her appearance andnature, even though she is rather rough and rather smelly. And you similarly love your man despite his faults.
I enjoyed your attempt at the sonnet form.
This line is out of metre:
(I've seen others seductive to behold)
suggest:
(As others more seductive to behold)
This line is out of metre and has too many syllables:
(I grant his dancing may not always do him proud)
suggest:
(I grant his dancing will not make him proud)
Welcome to Fanstory Susan, love Dolly x x x
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Shakespeare speaks of his mistress as honest in her appearance andnature, even though she is rather rough and rather smelly. And you similarly love your man despite his faults.
I enjoyed your attempt at the sonnet form.
This line is out of metre:
(I've seen others seductive to behold)
suggest:
(As others more seductive to behold)
This line is out of metre and has too many syllables:
(I grant his dancing may not always do him proud)
suggest:
(I grant his dancing will not make him proud)
Welcome to Fanstory Susan, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from jessizero
Congratulatons on your first milestone post! In high school, I wrote a version of Sonnet 130 called "Ode to Ethel." LOL. I liked your take on it from the female point-of-view. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Congratulatons on your first milestone post! In high school, I wrote a version of Sonnet 130 called "Ode to Ethel." LOL. I liked your take on it from the female point-of-view. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024