Recipe For Success
A wife has troubles with wanting to cook for her husband2 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This dialogue captures this couple so well. I love how you show the dynamics of their relationships. Marley's frustration with cooking and her desire to impress her husband comes through so well. And I thought Alex's supportive and teasing demeanor added some laughs. Great job.
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This dialogue captures this couple so well. I love how you show the dynamics of their relationships. Marley's frustration with cooking and her desire to impress her husband comes through so well. And I thought Alex's supportive and teasing demeanor added some laughs. Great job.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a fun piece of dialogue expressing Marley's angst over cooking for her husband and wanting to be perfect. I liked the way her brother is the perfect foil for her and calms her down so well. And the arrival of the husband at the end reinforces the message that she doesn't have to be perfect to be loved. This is all neatly captured here and is a very worthy and relatable entry for the contest. No errors found. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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This is a fun piece of dialogue expressing Marley's angst over cooking for her husband and wanting to be perfect. I liked the way her brother is the perfect foil for her and calms her down so well. And the arrival of the husband at the end reinforces the message that she doesn't have to be perfect to be loved. This is all neatly captured here and is a very worthy and relatable entry for the contest. No errors found. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
