Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Living On The Edge - Chap 19"The blending of good and evil.
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Yippy skippy. This is all falling into place. Good work. Great work. This does not feel rushed, and yet it sure does move. I am a happy camper. We now know that the chief's goose is cooked good and proper. Karen
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Yippy skippy. This is all falling into place. Good work. Great work. This does not feel rushed, and yet it sure does move. I am a happy camper. We now know that the chief's goose is cooked good and proper. Karen
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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You are awesome my friend...I've wrapped it up and tied the bow. Posted the final two chapters...hope you like them and feel free to throw in your expert advice. Thank you so much for all your kindness throughout and for the stars.
Much appreciated.....
Smiles, Carol
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Good work.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Garth is too cool for words. I love it!!!! I can't wait to see how Troy and Alyssa solve their problem.
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Sammy sighed, "Here's the plan. I'll get Troy inside (sighed.)
Tango interrupted her. "Garth? He's the (her, I like to show an actual interruption, I would write it. "Garth," Tango interrupted. "He's..)
Penny scowled, "A surprise?" I didn't think the Chief and the Cowboy. (scowled. & no quotation mark after 'surprise?')
Poppa smiled, "No problem. I'll get someone (smiled.)
Garth laughed, "And neither do you." (laughed.)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Garth is too cool for words. I love it!!!! I can't wait to see how Troy and Alyssa solve their problem.
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Sammy sighed, "Here's the plan. I'll get Troy inside (sighed.)
Tango interrupted her. "Garth? He's the (her, I like to show an actual interruption, I would write it. "Garth," Tango interrupted. "He's..)
Penny scowled, "A surprise?" I didn't think the Chief and the Cowboy. (scowled. & no quotation mark after 'surprise?')
Poppa smiled, "No problem. I'll get someone (smiled.)
Garth laughed, "And neither do you." (laughed.)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you as always....I've finished the book... 2 chapters. Now I need to answer reviews and then read so I can post. I hope no one is disappointed in it. I know you will happy with Garth. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Errors fixed and thanks
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I'm extremely happy with it.
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Thank you!
Comment from royowen
Doesn't it fell good to obtain the upper hand over a boisterous bully, who gets his way with bluster, the best way to overcome this type is by absolute truth, I loved this chapter Carol, your writing hasn't lost any of its spark. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Doesn't it fell good to obtain the upper hand over a boisterous bully, who gets his way with bluster, the best way to overcome this type is by absolute truth, I loved this chapter Carol, your writing hasn't lost any of its spark. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I've just finished the final two chapters. One is long and the other much shorter. It was difficult to wrap it up with one pretty bow. Now I must proof it and then read, read, read so I can post them. I always appreciate your reviews and of course, your encouragement.
Smiles, Carol
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Most welcome Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a sight Richard's face must have made! Lol. Now to find out how Alyssa with react when she is shown more. I think she'll be furious with Troy for not telling her straight away, she could even believe that he deliberately deceived her. You have some explanations to come up with, Carol!! Another amazing chapter. I hope you're nearly ready to post the next part!! :)) Love and hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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What a sight Richard's face must have made! Lol. Now to find out how Alyssa with react when she is shown more. I think she'll be furious with Troy for not telling her straight away, she could even believe that he deliberately deceived her. You have some explanations to come up with, Carol!! Another amazing chapter. I hope you're nearly ready to post the next part!! :)) Love and hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Hello, Sandra...
Been writing since three this morning. Chapter 20 is a long one, but I still couldn't fit it all in. But I'm almost through Chap. 21 the end. It won't be near as long. Then I have to read, because of course I am out of money. LOL You always prove to be the top notch writer that I think you are as you read my mind.... The final chapter has Troy and Alyssa and then formal charges against the Chief. Hurrah! I hope you and everyone enjoys it. It's sad to see it end.
Hugs and Smiles and love, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Oh, how I like it when the bad guys are about to get what they have coming to them. And this is one time that I especially like things being drawn out for maximum intensity. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Oh, how I like it when the bad guys are about to get what they have coming to them. And this is one time that I especially like things being drawn out for maximum intensity. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Yes, Ole Richard is about to get chopped down to size by the Cowboy. Glad you are enjoying. Thanks so much and have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
I've never been to pleased to see it may take another chapter (or two?) to tuck this baby in!
It's a visceral joy to "watch" Harrison falling apart...
No one deserves it more!
Very well written chapter ( as they all are!)
Two little things-
*whoops! :)
Is the Chief aware of this?" "No, ma'am. It's a surprise."
"No, ma'am, I'm afraid it's a surprise."
and "crazy characters" strike again:
"...didn't think the Chief and the cowâ?"
Oh, and have I mentioned I think Garth is awesome?
More please!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I've never been to pleased to see it may take another chapter (or two?) to tuck this baby in!
It's a visceral joy to "watch" Harrison falling apart...
No one deserves it more!
Very well written chapter ( as they all are!)
Two little things-
*whoops! :)
Is the Chief aware of this?" "No, ma'am. It's a surprise."
"No, ma'am, I'm afraid it's a surprise."
and "crazy characters" strike again:
"...didn't think the Chief and the cowâ?"
Oh, and have I mentioned I think Garth is awesome?
More please!
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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You and a few other ladies on the site. LOL I'm glad I decided to slide him into the story at the end. It's been fun.
Smiles, Carol
PS Book is complete (2 chapters) answering reviews and then off to read, read, read to get money to post.
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Me too!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is good, very very good. You are laying it out so Harrison is going to prove himself to be the incompetent, crooked, and cruel man that he is. I can't wait to see what comes next.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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This is good, very very good. You are laying it out so Harrison is going to prove himself to be the incompetent, crooked, and cruel man that he is. I can't wait to see what comes next.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Carol. It's sitting here and raring to go. Hope the ending is good enough for everyone.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
One more chapter? I am waiting with bated breath for the finale. Fun story right to the end! You do so well at crafting the story. Really enjoy reading your work! Esther
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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One more chapter? I am waiting with bated breath for the finale. Fun story right to the end! You do so well at crafting the story. Really enjoy reading your work! Esther
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Can't thank yu enough for your kindness and support. The book is finished (2 chapters) Answering all my reviews now and then reading to get money to post....oh yeah, and that proofing!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
I am going to really enjoy the Chief's discomfort as Jake appears, and shortly Troy and Alyssa. Everything will be exposed, including his corruption and probable criminal activity in more than one area I have very much enjoyed your story.
Wendy
Edit: Penny scowled, "A surprise?" I didn't think the Chief and the cowâ?" Garth hit it off yesterday." (cowboy)?
.... I don't know how long this will take?" (just a full stop here)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I am going to really enjoy the Chief's discomfort as Jake appears, and shortly Troy and Alyssa. Everything will be exposed, including his corruption and probable criminal activity in more than one area I have very much enjoyed your story.
Wendy
Edit: Penny scowled, "A surprise?" I didn't think the Chief and the cowâ?" Garth hit it off yesterday." (cowboy)?
.... I don't know how long this will take?" (just a full stop here)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thanks for pointing out my errors. Appreciate it as always.
It's all about to explode. The Cowboy is chopping Harrison down to size.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Good stuff, but I'm gonna get right to the edits:
1. Penny's eyebrows furrowed. "Is the Chief aware of this?" "No, ma'am. It's a surprise."
"No, ma'am, I'm afraid it's a surprise." (You have this line twice)
2. Penny scowled, "A surprise?" I didn't think the Chief and the cowâ?" Garth hit it off yesterday." (Fix gremlin, and the quote marks are off)
3. Penny giggled and thought, "A Star is Born!" (My recommendation is to put thoughts in italics with no quotes.)
4. I don't know how long this will take?" (No question mark)
5.Throughout the chapter you say "the Chief" and "the mayor". I think you need to pick which way you prefer capitalizing it and be consistent about it.
I love seeing that jerk twist in the wind!
Julie
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Good stuff, but I'm gonna get right to the edits:
1. Penny's eyebrows furrowed. "Is the Chief aware of this?" "No, ma'am. It's a surprise."
"No, ma'am, I'm afraid it's a surprise." (You have this line twice)
2. Penny scowled, "A surprise?" I didn't think the Chief and the cowâ?" Garth hit it off yesterday." (Fix gremlin, and the quote marks are off)
3. Penny giggled and thought, "A Star is Born!" (My recommendation is to put thoughts in italics with no quotes.)
4. I don't know how long this will take?" (No question mark)
5.Throughout the chapter you say "the Chief" and "the mayor". I think you need to pick which way you prefer capitalizing it and be consistent about it.
I love seeing that jerk twist in the wind!
Julie
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thanks for all the pointers. I think I caught them all. Been writing all day since 3 a.m. but the books done. Took 2 chapters to finish. Hope everyone likes it.
Smiles, Carol
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You are amazing!!
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I don't know about that...Tell me again after you read the ending.
Smiles, Carol