thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Smiling"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
29 total reviews
Comment from Mark Jackson
Never heard of a Sedoka so you have introduced me to something new with this. No one could argue with the sentiment and it meets the prompt. What is not to like. Thank you.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Never heard of a Sedoka so you have introduced me to something new with this. No one could argue with the sentiment and it meets the prompt. What is not to like. Thank you.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Mark, Thank you for your review. I appreciate it. That is one thing I like about Fanstory,I get to learn new things and different ways of writing. That was my first time writing a Sedoka poem.
Comment from jim vecchio
It's a fir assumption you made all of FS smile with your words and the accompanying photo. A very good sedoka. I hope many will not just read this, but take your words to heart.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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It's a fir assumption you made all of FS smile with your words and the accompanying photo. A very good sedoka. I hope many will not just read this, but take your words to heart.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your review and kind words. I appreciate it. I always try to smile when out and about. hope you have a big smile to share. I am sending you one.
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I don't have much to share, but a smile is always there!
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-crafted poem. A smile is very important to have. Each line of your poem connects well with the next. Your 5-7-7 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Nice complimentary picture too. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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This is a well-crafted poem. A smile is very important to have. Each line of your poem connects well with the next. Your 5-7-7 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Nice complimentary picture too. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review and kind words. I appreciate it.
Comment from locust
Aww! Very sweet! A warm smile can really change someone's mood. I have a few suggestions if I may. For example
Smile! It's contagious.
Just go and pass it around.
Perhaps you will get one back.
If you have a smile,
Just go ahead and share it,
You just might make someone's day!
The added punctuation helps the reader know how to read it. The internal rhyme of perhAps and bAck has a nice sound to it. Making the second to last line a call to action makes the reader want to smile as he reads. :)
Such a charming little poem! I really enjoyed it! Best of luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Aww! Very sweet! A warm smile can really change someone's mood. I have a few suggestions if I may. For example
Smile! It's contagious.
Just go and pass it around.
Perhaps you will get one back.
If you have a smile,
Just go ahead and share it,
You just might make someone's day!
The added punctuation helps the reader know how to read it. The internal rhyme of perhAps and bAck has a nice sound to it. Making the second to last line a call to action makes the reader want to smile as he reads. :)
Such a charming little poem! I really enjoyed it! Best of luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review and kind comments. I do appreciate it.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I just love the picture you joined to this poem. The piece itself was light-headed and fun. It bounced along to it's funny beat taking me along for the ride.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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I just love the picture you joined to this poem. The piece itself was light-headed and fun. It bounced along to it's funny beat taking me along for the ride.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review and nice comment. I do appreciate it. SMILES TO YOU.
Comment from Ulla
Yes, I couldn't agree more. If you smile a lot you're also most likely being smiled back at. A smile doesn't cost anything and it most likely makes you feel happy but the recipient as well. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Yes, I couldn't agree more. If you smile a lot you're also most likely being smiled back at. A smile doesn't cost anything and it most likely makes you feel happy but the recipient as well. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for you review and comment. I appreciate it.
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Good luck on the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Good luck on the contest!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review and kind words. I appreciate it.
Comment from jessizero
Your sedoka was nice, and you got the syllable count right. If anything, I might add some kind of punctuation on that first line. A dash after "smile" would help, for example. Of course, it's your poem and you can feel free to ignore me. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Your sedoka was nice, and you got the syllable count right. If anything, I might add some kind of punctuation on that first line. A dash after "smile" would help, for example. Of course, it's your poem and you can feel free to ignore me. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review, I do appreciate it.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A smile will last for miles. A smile will penetrate someone's heart. It will make a person feel better so they can have a better day! Love the smiles in the image.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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A smile will last for miles. A smile will penetrate someone's heart. It will make a person feel better so they can have a better day! Love the smiles in the image.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank for taking the time to review my poem. I appreciate it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
We are given the ability to smile so that we may share and give the smile away. As your inspirational poem states, a smile might brighten someone's day. Your chosen artwork pairs perfectly with your words and intensifies your message. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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We are given the ability to smile so that we may share and give the smile away. As your inspirational poem states, a smile might brighten someone's day. Your chosen artwork pairs perfectly with your words and intensifies your message. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review and nice comments. I appreciate it.