The Bone Tag
A story for dog lovers8 total reviews
Comment from Sueswrite
I enjoyed reading your story and found it to be an easy, pleasant, down-to-earth, conversational event that left nothing unopened on the table to question. When the answers are complete during a reading, the focus is stable, presenting a crisp and detailed scenario, from cover to cover. Well written, in my opinion. I wish you the best with this fun themed contest!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed reading your story and found it to be an easy, pleasant, down-to-earth, conversational event that left nothing unopened on the table to question. When the answers are complete during a reading, the focus is stable, presenting a crisp and detailed scenario, from cover to cover. Well written, in my opinion. I wish you the best with this fun themed contest!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I am so pleased you found my story an "easy, pleasant, down-to-earth" read, Suewrite. It was fun to write. Rod
Comment from Wendy G
A very nice feel- good story with a happy ending. I enjoyed the read, and the clear writing. Well done. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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A very nice feel- good story with a happy ending. I enjoyed the read, and the clear writing. Well done. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hi, Wendy. I am delighted you enjoyed my story. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a delightful 'boy and his dog' story. I understand grandpa's reaction because he wanted a dog also. Even though Billy's mom did not want a dog, dogs have a way of warming your heart and adding joy to your life. You have told a compelling story about a lucky dog who will live happily ever after, because a little boy found a bone tag. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This is a delightful 'boy and his dog' story. I understand grandpa's reaction because he wanted a dog also. Even though Billy's mom did not want a dog, dogs have a way of warming your heart and adding joy to your life. You have told a compelling story about a lucky dog who will live happily ever after, because a little boy found a bone tag. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I am delighted you found my story heart-warming and compelling. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Nice story. Kinda knew where it was headed though. Who could disappoint a boy and a dog, especially under the tutelage of a grandpa? Maybe this is a true life story. idk. Good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Nice story. Kinda knew where it was headed though. Who could disappoint a boy and a dog, especially under the tutelage of a grandpa? Maybe this is a true life story. idk. Good luck.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thank you,Tom, for sharing my story. Yes, it is somewhat based on truth.
Comment from M_Esther
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. Throughout the whole thing, I kept wanting to know what was going to happen next. Your grandson's endearing persistence and love for his family--and for dogs!--really came through well.
My main suggestion is to maybe draw the ending out a little longer. I wanted to know how you were feeling when you got off the phone with your daughter. Obviously, you were happy with her decision to keep the dog, but I wanted to go deeper into your feelings at that moment. Also, maybe instead of saying huge orb, just say "sun" and add something about the dog, like "I hung up and smiled, watching the risen sun and thinking about how happy Billy would be that they could keep Wonka after all" (or something like that).
But overall, I think it's a strong story and you seemed like you had fun writing it. You were right: this is a great story for dog lovers. Thanks for sharing it!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. Throughout the whole thing, I kept wanting to know what was going to happen next. Your grandson's endearing persistence and love for his family--and for dogs!--really came through well.
My main suggestion is to maybe draw the ending out a little longer. I wanted to know how you were feeling when you got off the phone with your daughter. Obviously, you were happy with her decision to keep the dog, but I wanted to go deeper into your feelings at that moment. Also, maybe instead of saying huge orb, just say "sun" and add something about the dog, like "I hung up and smiled, watching the risen sun and thinking about how happy Billy would be that they could keep Wonka after all" (or something like that).
But overall, I think it's a strong story and you seemed like you had fun writing it. You were right: this is a great story for dog lovers. Thanks for sharing it!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, M. Esther, for taking the time to read my story and write this lengthy review. I truly appreciate your high praise and your suggestion about extending the ending. I will work on that.
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I followed your advice added lines to my ending. Again, many thanks.
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You're welcome. I really like the new ending. I think it's perfect!
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a found it writing prompt entry, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your writing prompt entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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This is a found it writing prompt entry, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your writing prompt entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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I am delighted you enjoyed my story, Doctor Ricky. Thank you for your kind praise of my theme and imagery.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh thank goodness for a happy ending! I was getting very concerned. The story was well written, descriptive, and paced well. The dialog was believable and smooth. All in all a very pleasant, sweet story. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Oh thank goodness for a happy ending! I was getting very concerned. The story was well written, descriptive, and paced well. The dialog was believable and smooth. All in all a very pleasant, sweet story. Nicely done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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So pleased I could give you a satisfying ending, Marilyn. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, mystery writer, what an amazing tale. You made me laugh, you made me cry, and then you made me smile. You made me feel, and you kept me engaged. Well done,
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Wow, mystery writer, what an amazing tale. You made me laugh, you made me cry, and then you made me smile. You made me feel, and you kept me engaged. Well done,
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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I am thrilled my story evoked all those emotional responses, Rhonda. Thank you for sharing.
