Her Pain and Her Scar
A pain with her recover for her scar5 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Free Form Poetry contest. The message being conveyed is clear and easy to identify. Some very nice descriptive words and phrases. I did notice one typoe that you will want to fix. (Without speaking becasue of her brain). The word "because" is misspelled. Very nice work. Good luck in the contest.
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An excellent entry for the Free Form Poetry contest. The message being conveyed is clear and easy to identify. Some very nice descriptive words and phrases. I did notice one typoe that you will want to fix. (Without speaking becasue of her brain). The word "because" is misspelled. Very nice work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on your first milesotne post! Your poem was harsh, and I mean that in a good way. I liked the "scar on her brain" bit. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Congratulations on your first milesotne post! Your poem was harsh, and I mean that in a good way. I liked the "scar on her brain" bit. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from royowen
There are a number of things that can cause injuries, both physical and the unseen ones of the soul, although they can leave scars, but recovery is up to the injured, well done, welcome to fabstory, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : She (recoved) from: recovered?
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There are a number of things that can cause injuries, both physical and the unseen ones of the soul, although they can leave scars, but recovery is up to the injured, well done, welcome to fabstory, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : She (recoved) from: recovered?
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
Welcome to fan story! Your first entry, this poem, is very heartfelt, and an honest commentary of the effects of trauma.
I found one typo:
Without speaking becasue of her brain (because)
Thanks for sharing! Julie
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Welcome to fan story! Your first entry, this poem, is very heartfelt, and an honest commentary of the effects of trauma.
I found one typo:
Without speaking becasue of her brain (because)
Thanks for sharing! Julie
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I have had MS for 31 years so I understand this, thought provoking poetry. Writing can bring back some of One's voice, that disease takes. Good for you. I could relate to this and will keep it.
Best wishes,
Alex
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I have had MS for 31 years so I understand this, thought provoking poetry. Writing can bring back some of One's voice, that disease takes. Good for you. I could relate to this and will keep it.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
