Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Living On The Edge - Chap 7"The blending of good and evil.
18 total reviews
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You have portrayed Layla s emotions very well. I do not see any need for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. You have portrayed Layla s emotions very well. I do not see any need for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thank you again for continuing to read and spend your time on my story. Thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
This is just great stuff, Carol. I so enjoy reading this story. It a lot to catch up.on but I'm determined. I admire you for writing this and every day and then such a well in written story. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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This is just great stuff, Carol. I so enjoy reading this story. It a lot to catch up.on but I'm determined. I admire you for writing this and every day and then such a well in written story. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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It's a lot to stuff into a chapter every day in order to reach the finish line. I'm enjoy the story as it unfolds too so I don't want to move to fast. If you feel overwhelmed, with so many characters, Chapter 10 will help you figure it out. Two of the characters are talking and they kind of recap what's happening. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I just hope that Layla doesn't go rushing into this and find herself in trouble too. A girl on her own in a city is not a good idea. From the sounds of it Allie is still alive, the men didn't seem happy with the state Allie is in and are really angry at what she'd been put through. Now I'm asking myself, are these the good guys? We will see. Another great chapter, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I just hope that Layla doesn't go rushing into this and find herself in trouble too. A girl on her own in a city is not a good idea. From the sounds of it Allie is still alive, the men didn't seem happy with the state Allie is in and are really angry at what she'd been put through. Now I'm asking myself, are these the good guys? We will see. Another great chapter, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I can guarantee you Layla is a headstrong entrepreneur that forges forward with gusto... she'll try to do the same here, but she's in over her head. Technically, no...Frankie is a mobster, but he also stays true to his friends. Jake has asked him for his help...in return staying clear of getting him in trouble. One hand washes the other....Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Layla knew who to call about getting someone to do something about Alyssa's call. Unfortunately, someone who arrived just after Alyssa was assaulted could find no evidence of what happened. Layla is going to Rockford herself; another good cliffhanger.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Layla knew who to call about getting someone to do something about Alyssa's call. Unfortunately, someone who arrived just after Alyssa was assaulted could find no evidence of what happened. Layla is going to Rockford herself; another good cliffhanger.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I believe someone did a clean up job... No evidence, no crime. Alyssa was kidnapped and then kidnapped again. Poor girl can't even know what's happening...LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Things keep getting more and more complicated. Of course, your stubborn and independent-minded female characters have to go running into action. ð??? That's a sure way to end the marriage proposal.
I wonder if Layla knows that police chief who changed his name since they were all old neighborhood friends.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Things keep getting more and more complicated. Of course, your stubborn and independent-minded female characters have to go running into action. ð??? That's a sure way to end the marriage proposal.
I wonder if Layla knows that police chief who changed his name since they were all old neighborhood friends.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I do tend to make my female characters jump right into the fire. don't I? Guess that says a lot about me. LOL No wimps here...just survivors, even if they don't know what they are doing. Thanks so much for enjoying the story.
Smiles, Carol
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Lol. It takes all kinds - the DOers and the Thinkers to make the world go round...or the plot to progress!
Comment from Esther Brown
Twisting and turning your plot like a sneaky snake....
I don't read this kind of stuff much. Sue Grafton all the way to Z but she died before she completed Z as far as I know...
You are a good writer. When you finish this book I will read the whole thing.
Esther
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Twisting and turning your plot like a sneaky snake....
I don't read this kind of stuff much. Sue Grafton all the way to Z but she died before she completed Z as far as I know...
You are a good writer. When you finish this book I will read the whole thing.
Esther
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks Esther. I am glad that you have enjoyed the chapters in the book. Thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Great action sequence. The only thing that puzzled me was if I had been in Layla's place, I think I would've just called 911 immediately. It seems a little odd that she went and had some coffee and cookies to calm down before telling the detective what happened. I have no idea, but do you know if video chats are recorded automatically?
I couldn't find anything to correct, at all! Great job! Julie
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Great action sequence. The only thing that puzzled me was if I had been in Layla's place, I think I would've just called 911 immediately. It seems a little odd that she went and had some coffee and cookies to calm down before telling the detective what happened. I have no idea, but do you know if video chats are recorded automatically?
I couldn't find anything to correct, at all! Great job! Julie
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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He went to get the coffee to give her time to stop crying so he could understand what she was saying. He was only out of the car about five minutes. You don't think that works? Calling 911 wouldn't help because she was thousands of miles away in a different city.
Smiles, Carol
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I do understand the distance issue. It just would be my reaction to call the police I guess. I wouldn't worry about it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Okay, I'm confused. One girl goes to the sanitarium, and one girl goes back to the house. When did there become two girls? Does Alyssa go to the sanitarium or house? Other than that, everything is clear with non-stop action. See you in the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Okay, I'm confused. One girl goes to the sanitarium, and one girl goes back to the house. When did there become two girls? Does Alyssa go to the sanitarium or house? Other than that, everything is clear with non-stop action. See you in the next chapter.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Layla, the sister in NewYork has flown to Rockford to discover what happen to her sister. She thinks her sister was murdered.... Which she was suppose to be, but the murderer was interrupted and Alyssa who was unconscious was taken to the sanitarium. (but know one knows that except Frankie the gangster. Did that help? If not, tell me and I'll try to make it clearer.
Smiles, Carol
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Thank you Carol. That really helped. I didn't realize Layla was already in Rockford when Antonio showed up. I thought she was still in New York, talking on the phone to her sister.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always fun to try and figure out what's going on or what might happen in the near future, but with you, sometimes that's not easy. I've felt like like Richard to the real bad guy all along. And maybe, he might have even been the one who should have been in jail rather than his brother. "Anyway, that's my story and I'm sticking to it," for now. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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It's always fun to try and figure out what's going on or what might happen in the near future, but with you, sometimes that's not easy. I've felt like like Richard to the real bad guy all along. And maybe, he might have even been the one who should have been in jail rather than his brother. "Anyway, that's my story and I'm sticking to it," for now. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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It's a good story, my friend...but there's so much more going on. You'll love chapter 8 I think...Thanks for the time and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Boy do you keep things clipping along. You have got me hooked. There is so much going on. Thanks for keeping the index up there, it is needed from time to time. Karen
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Boy do you keep things clipping along. You have got me hooked. There is so much going on. Thanks for keeping the index up there, it is needed from time to time. Karen
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Maybe I'll knock a few off from time to time so you don't have to remember all of them. LOL I'm working on #9 at the moment. Thanks for reading and enjoying.
Smiles, Carol
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You are my Queen! If I ever lose my mind and want to serialize one of my stories, I know who to come to for advice. Karen :-)